Nice. Tommy is such a wet blanket. HA.

I like how you captured the choppy, to the piont naration that they have in the movie. It was a very appealing one shot. Good job.

hmm good story i liked it i feel bad for tommy but he's lucky he still has turkish to talk to. i also have a story idea that you can use a story about why tommy can understand the pikeys.

I like your story I am looking forward to see how it turns out should you continue to write it.