Very well written. I like how you kept it to the game but jumped back between Sho's point of view and what was happening around him. Hope that made sense ^_^;

I liked it very much.

I actually thought this was really good! It was well written of the cannon event and he was pretty in-character.

But now that I think about it, it was kinda disrectpectful that Neku and co. stole Sho's hat...I mean he was dying and all...XD

Good job and keep it up!

~Neko-lily

Interesting. I liked it - especially the fact that you brought up the possibility that Sho's flawed sigil might have weakened him.

Also, Sho was unconscious when Neku, Shiki, and Beat arrived. If he wasn't he probably would have said something along the lines of "Factor away, you stupid zeros!"

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SG

That was really good, I thought, and in character, without being annoying with more math puns than neccessary.