As the feedback submission below states,a well rounded critique is often the most rewarding gift a reader can give. That's what I'm going to attempt to do here. I want people to write good stories.

I wish I could give you a good review. However, I can't do that in good conscience. Someone needs to tell you the truth.

What's with all the "song titles"? Is that supposed to be the outline of your story? If those are indeed song titles, and I have no idea if they really are or not, your readers are not going to be humming along while they read your story. Totally irrelevant. You can put your chapter titles at the beginning of each chapter, not here.

Spellcheck can be your friend. It may not be perfect, but it will save you from the errors that pepper your story. Did you reread this at all before you posted it? It certainly doesn't look like you did. You should have someone else (a friend, maybe?) read your stories before you post. Even the best writers have editors. J. K. Rowling doesn't print her first draft. You shouldn't either.

The name of one of your main characters is even spelled wrong. "Logen: Wolverine, Don't make me stuipd smack you" What? What do you mean by insulting your readers here? (And in the lines above that.) That's certainly not the way to attract readers to your stories.

S.H.I.E.L.D. You didn't even spell the name of the organization correctly. Something that is a core element of your story (which I am still trying to decipher) should be spelled right, and referred to consistently, either with or without the initials. The comics use the initials.

Your character bios have enough typos in them to make the reader's head swim. You give away any sort of story you might be intending to tell in these bios. Why should I bother to read the story?

Actually, I couldn't make it through the first "chapter". You need a beta reader in the worst way. Somewhere in there, you might have a story to tell. I suggest that you quit trying to see how many vulgar words you can put in here, and work toward thinking about a plot. Go for substance, not shock value. I'll bet you can do it if you put your mind to it. Good luck.

Okay, many things.

The first that comes to mind is good idea. I like how this story, unlike most on DD's fandom isn't focused around our favorite hero. Good to see someone's branching off. Now sorry to be the bearer of bad news. I know how depressing it can be to get criticisms in reviews, so PM me for full disclosure, if you would like more. Anyway, sticking positive, you have an interesting story-line going for you. Keep it up and don't be discouraged.