I very much enjoyed Citizen Erased! Well written, nice pacing and excellent dialogue. I'm looking forward to reading the sequel and your other stories as well. Thanks for sharing your talent. :)

Hi. Since you were looking for German native speakers, I'll do my best to help you :)

"Stoppen Sie bitte" doesn't sound right for me in this context. It's too formal. Like something a police officer would say to you if he wants you to stop your car. You could use "Hör auf" (=stop it) or "Bitte hör auf" (=please stop it).

Just want to tell you, that I really enjoy your story.

hey, was that the end? is it finished allready? i love this story, are u going to continue this on or not?

Oh my Godric!! He doesn't remember her?! What the hell kind of bullets were those?!

You just left me on the most insane cliffhanger, and I freakin out here lol.

So excited for the sequel

Great chapter...can't wait for the next story.

I can't wait for the squeal.

I loved this story. I'm excited there's going to be a sequel! Can't wait.

I just want you to know that I died a little. I can't believe you're going to leave us all hanging like that! Gahh! I'm going to die of anticipation!

I love this story and can't wait for the next segment!

-Kate

Thanks for the heads up on the sequel..Adding you to author alert now. See you on the other side ;)

YAy! I'm so excited I love your story!

i love the first chapter ;)

Brava! :)

Well, I'll definitely be following your new story. When I got the update that you have updated Citizen, I was like, "darn. I'm following, I've reviewed a few times, I've favorited it, what am I going to do now? wish I could rate it." And viola, you're working on the sequel. Yay!

Cheers.
Changer.

wow what a ending>...so did not see that one coming. a huge round of applause to you. I cannot wait for the sequel great job.

Def cant wait for the new story. Hopefully you'll post that you posted the new story on here so we can switch over.