not bad, could use some work but... it kept my interest

very interesting concept, have you read the 1st issue of Ultimate Comics Spider-Man. it hasn't yet revealed details on how when and where exactly Peter was reunited with his family or how his wounds where heals, so so far this fic could actually be cannon.

I like how you mixed her mainstream comic origins with the Ultimate'verse, makes for a somewhat less confusing relationship between Jessica and Peter.