Normally, I'm not a big fan of present tense, but you pulled it off very nicely. The end is my favorite

That was adorable; I enjoyed reading it. The question you had Jack asked Mary made me giggle. lol

I love how you make such simple situations so intruiging and fun to read.

I thought this was really cute, it was just a bubble of "aw".

How cute!

nice story as usual! X3

and I love that you put those two last sentences... seriously sweet

keep writting,)

very cute. i enjoyed reading this!

Aww that was cute, I hope he does come back.
Nicely written.

Nice. It seems like a perfect little exchange, confusing but intruiging enough that you want to try and figure it out...

Aw, that was a sweet story.
I think you did a fine job of capturing Mary's personality and I found it nice the way they got along. Even though it was just a tab short, I think you did a good job. But then again, why should I be surprised by that! _
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