*BRAVO!*BRAVO!*CLAP!*APPLAUD!* WOW! I have been reading fanfics for years and I must say this is one of the best fanfics I have read! I am in complete awe at your impressive writing. Keep up the good work! WOW! I started reading this fic and the writing was so good that I couldn't stop reading! And this fic is the most original fic I have ever read. Excellent job!)

This story is so depressing, but in such an odd fashion. I kept confusing myself when characters whose deaths I’d just sadfaced over kept popping up, and then I’d have to remind myself that the chapters are backwards. So, hey, enjoy ‘em now ‘cause THEY STILL GONNA DIE. YOU ALREADY READ HOW EACH DEATH HAPPENS.

Miharu made me supah sad. And then poor Lars, being a wreck over Alisa never getting fixed and then being offed by Abel. Stupid Abel. And Doctor Boskonovitch… Oh, poor tiny Boskonovitch. I even felt bad for Lili. More for Sebastian, but even Lili! Tragedy after tragedy.

I see OC cameooooos. Fufufufufu!

I KNEW IT WOULD BE JULIA. I KNEWED IT.
This story has messed with my feelings. But in such a wonderful, terrible way.

oh fuck, wow. i love the feel of this. you have real talent for angst and writing in general. i ADORE how you did this backwards. gorgeous work.

brilliant. seriously, just brilliant. induces the feeling you get when you read something like romeo and juliet you know the outcome, but read on like a masochist to find the full story because it's so gripping and well written and utterly, utterly heartbreaking. very grim stuff, too. i LOVE the backwards narration [is that what it's called? i have no idea]. again, that galling feeling of reading about characters living and talking and knowing their fate is genius.

all in all very well done!

Love the way your writing. It's feels so natural when read it. :D

Keep writing!

Heyyyyy
The criticism You use adverbs a lot. Try showing us, or rewording a description, to avoid adverbs. Example"I wrap both my arms around you comfortingly..." You don't need "comfortingly." The action itself implies that it's comforting. Another adverb I see"the glass door is kicked in viciously." It's a bit redundant, because does one ever kick in a glass door gently? Idk, that's just my opinion. Tense shifts. In several instances, you briefly switch to past tense, then present again. You tend to describe every detail of everything. It's your style, I understand, and it provides for raw visuals; but be careful not to overdo it. It can bog down the action/plot/reading flow.

The compliments
Her-well, Julia's-death scene was pretty powerful. I love how you don't make it sappy and dramatic like lots of people. She just, plain and simple, dies. That suddenness, that single moment that takes away a whole person, is so realistic; Hwo doesn't even have a chance to mourn or recover. Jeez."None of that is important, because I've lost what I was fighting for. _ And yet, later, he still fights. It's so like him to keep on going, even when he claims he's lost it all. He's totally capable of falling into his own despair-but when it comes down to it, if he's still breathing, he'll keep fighting. You've captured that spirit well, especially when Jin comes along and calls him worthless.

I also like the injections of lyrics in here"You think you've won this fight, you've only lost your mind..." Sooo appropriate for this scene right now.
But my favorite? "Show me where forever dies." Gahh, it just makes so much sense! I forgot this was in the song *goes and listens to song* Perfect line for this chapter. Forever, like his lover, his hope, his future, is definitely finite.

I read this fic in one sitting and after that I was rolling on my bed. I dunno why...

I really love the way you write. I should go practice on using Hwoarang right now.

SOOO excited for this chapter. squee

First few paragraphs built tension amazingly. They were just perfect And this? "We want to fall, so we'll be free. Not to our deaths, but to our redemption." Beautiful. And you know it
Those two nameless people Hwoarang described. Dead. FUCK, man. Very sad. And the two after that. Very nice how you slid them in here though. Just horrifically saddening D
A sad lol at the little exchange between Hwo and Julia. He never does change XD
A beautiful ending beginning to a horrific story. You did it man! This was immeeeense!
... aw man you are too sweet. I miss you too.. thank you. Thank you thank you thank you, you big BAKKY FACE! Oh and where's my Yoochun... -SLAP!- XD mucho love big sis.

JULIA CHANG, JEWLIUGH CHANG, JOOOLEYUH CHANGGGH I KNEW IT!

Now it all makes sense! Again, sorry for not reviewing this fic sooner. I'm so glad I did because it was one HELL of a ride and it made the tears flow more than once, my friend!

Excellent story! I loved every minute of it and will be forever in my heart.)

'"Although we can't go outside, I appreciate your suggestion. It shows you care.
I grin goofily and spin around on my heels, "Its okay. You're a…" What's the right English word… "…team mate, yeah? You've got my back, I've got yours?"What about 'friend'?" You query, walking towards me.

The grin intensifies, "That too. D'AWWWW X3

Why is it that whenever I read this fic, I can never stop crying? XD I even cry at the happy times! Maybe that's because there's only a few in these dark times...'I really wish he didn't wear those shorts because his grossly hairy legs are on display to the world. Shave or jeans, please. OMG ROFL!'I used to know a kid who dressed like this, he was pretty smart and all, so when I had absolutely no inspiration whatsoever, I thought of people I once knew and picked their outfit. I have an idea of which kid he speaks of... :P

D: Lili died and so did SEBASTIAN! *cries
Seriously, man, this story is one of the best I've read besides the 'Me' series.)

Miharu committed suicide...
This whole situation is getting completely out of hand and will keep doing so unless Hwoarang has a brainwave riiight abooout...NOW.

My hatrid for Jin is rapidly increasing with every chapter...

Took a while but I'm here again!"You scar me," I joke, in reference to the 'clever' part. You basically think I'm stupid. Thanks. LOL Aww! But we love you stupid! X3

Awww, at the end! 333333 That was awesome!

this has been a really great ride, sad to see it end, even if most of my beloved angst is at the start of the story will get to know who the woman is next chapter right? i have an idea but yeah keep it up you rock

The first line had me loling so by then I knew I was gonna continue my love for this story
I love Asuka's comical plan with the bombs and jewels. Mde me chuckle at how fitting it was for her to think of something so mad
Oh my god, FUCK OFF Tekken Force! DX Ahem...anyway...'In a world that is his, we are his toys. His only pleasure. I'm sorry, but I had to giggle at this line XD

Not Asuka as well. I'm getting totally pissed with Jin/

How can Hwoarang have the hope and will power left? I'll tell you why. Because he is fucking HWOARANG :D

So much angst. How have I not gone insane yet? lol

Not Lei He's not my fave character whilst playing the game but in this fic he is currently my 2nd favourite. Well, was my favourite :P"Lei Wulong," you say, wiping tears from your eyes, "The Shepard of the Damned. And damned we are. No, Hwoa! Do NOT give up D: