This is probably about the fifth time i read this and its very well written (actually is phenominally written!). I dont know what i can say that hasnt already been said. no critique from me (didnt see any errors). i love the writing style and i like how you portrayed soma's internal battle (whether shes soma or marie she still has strong feelings for allelujah). your a spectacular writer. i just wish youd write another (H)Alle/SoMarie fic(hint hint);)

I always found it quite interesting that in the end...regardless of Soma or Marie being "in charge" both seemed to have strong feelings for Allelujah..

I've had trippy dreams like that. They're really disturbing, and make you doubt reality for the first few seconds after you wake up. Somehow you captured that here, and made me catch my breath when Soma pulled the trigger.

I know that's not very constructive, but it's the best I can do right now. Thank you for sharing this.

Interesting story, I like that Soma and Marie were on the same places. They are so different but are the same. Even had strong felings for Alle. I like the story

I like your story, hope you can make another one.