you update ! nice chapter. it's been so long since the last time I reviewed a chapter here. One question, why do you use mister and missis rather than -san for their name?

one word only - awsomical! - Avi.

Yay! Update. Great chapter, yet again. Ren's trick with his finger was squeal-worthy! Anticipating the next chapter and Ren's reaction. Oh, and the lemon^^

this is interesting.. pls continue

What an excellent kiss scene! Good that you didn’t make it into a lemon. I think you shouldn’t take this story along to quickly; this is Kyoko we are talking about.
Btw, I don’t think Ren knows that Kyoko is called Bo, I think he only knows of her as ‘that chicken’ or something along those lines.

A very wonderfully described passionate kiss between my two favourite characters...

Hope to read more future chapters and keep up the good work...

Lol! The image of Jelly running in and Kyoko adverting her thoughts just cracked me up. Thanks!

This is so in character! I wish it would be longer not just shortish. It’s great that you actually have a build up story to tell and it isn’t just a random story where the characters names can just be replaced with other peoples.
I liked Chiori being included as not many people seem to add her. Lol, Kyoko’s reaction really fits how she’d probably act if she was really in that situation.
‘“Yes, I really love oran-- Oh!! I mean I don't love it, not like that kind of love! Um. It's... um, fine?”’
Oh and I like how Ren told Kyoko his story, but I don’t think he would drink alcohol in front of Kyoko. And now Ren has died his hair or is it just the sun?
Can’t wait to see what happens next and seeing how you’ll continue to keep everyone in character. Update please.

Ahh JLP you have finally updated. Speaking for the whole story I just can say: What a great built-up you have created. Writing something lemon-flavored which involves Kyouko and Ren is very hard to handle, given to their characters...but you managed to do this very convincing. Kyoko and Ren are absolute believable and in character, so great job.

Oh and as a fellow writer I know how much malice fun it is to leave off with a cliffy...but I really hate you for that one...lol.

OH YEAH!

Nice work :)

*cyber glomp!*

Oh! jelly to the rescue. Kyoko's reaction to her though is totally in character (and sensible. Ren. Really. Think man! No need to be so dramatic!). And the little details you put in, like Ren's thoughts on Bo and Kyoko's uncomfortable hotel memories, are just great.

Keep up the good work!

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What a tortuous moment to cut off at! Horror of all horrors! Please Update soon! I may die if you do not.

Amazing as always!

HE DIES HIS HAIR BLONDE! I'm still trying to pick ma jaw up off the ground!
Please update son! <3

OMF! - that means 'oh my fudge' - i can't wait till the next chapter! -Avi.