Hi, Love your story..!! Can't wait for the next update..XD

and, oh yeah.. I also thought of that too, Richard running around with a Teenage girl in his arms.. haha..
anyway, Scarlett's Father (this is Necropolis Time, right?) died, it just happens that Matt didn't tell her, but she knows.. :), and also...(having a hard time saying *_*) Scarlett's...been, shot..not in the chest...but in her head, which Matt cried out that time...

hope you remembered, and..you just said that you read the Necropolis so i helped you to remember it...but anywho..

I LOVE IT. *u*..can't wait for the next one.. XD

First, Woo!! Update!

Second, yeah, Kowloon is right.. I think!

And finally. :D good chapter, but thing, when you separate Richard and Scar's PoV, maybe put asterisks or something? And VERY good ending, I think.
I look forward to the next update... xD

friggin awesome. yeah.

Ok, I swear I'm not a crazed fangirl.. but oh! Scott! xD
And then "So that was the first reason he knew it wasn't Nevada." that line is rather awesome. Fits very well.
And the whole bit with Scott - especially the last bit - mega eerie! Ooh I'm all interested now.. I mean, I was before, but now...

And then Jamie's bit! Poor guy!

And now please update quickly. That was a bit off a cliffhanger. And I want more from the twins.
Cait x

I can't wait for the final PO5 to come out and this sothing perfect to pass the time. Keep writing 10/10

i hope they get reunited soon!

AH! YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW MUCH I LIKE YOU RIGHT NOW! thanks for writing a Po5 story! And a very nicely written one at that!

Firstly - love the chapter (as always xD)
And one thing which struck me is that you had 2 chapters of Matt before Pedro.. I don't think you did this deliberately - or maybe you did, whatever - but it just reminded me of how AH used the first book and the first half of the next all on Matt and no one else. I like it xD.

And the first bit of it, the whole description, it's a great one! I love the bit "just a darker shade of white." It's so (why can I never think of a better word?) effective! I love the oxymoron of it too. Just really great.

And Pedro's character was really good. In all of the books you don't get all that much from him, but how you made him fits so well! I especially love the little bit explaining why he wouldn't complain - definitely as it said how he would complain only he'd been taught not to, instead of being just so macho or whatever xD.

'Nother chapter please!

Thanks, I appreciate that. It was a lot harder to write this chapter. Oh well, this has turned out much more different than what I expected.
And yes, the other characters will be mentioned for sure!
I'm very happy you found it ... effective. :D

I love the variation between long and short sentences. It's really effective xD
And especially - "And then he smelt it... And then he heard it:"
It's really good repetition there xD
And i really like the last sentence - the simple 3 words are really (i'm trying to think of a different word here but i can't) effective.

Just a comment of general interest.. are any of the other five going to be featured as a POV? Just wondering... xD

Haha, no I'm not British and I haven't ever been there. I hope to go one day though.

Thanks for the info! It totally slipped my mind to think about the date. :S I'll have to change it.
Anyways, ...

-Miranda

Hey this is good! I hope you continue it.

Just one thing... Have you ever been to Glasgow? From your choice of words, ("cell phone") I'm guessing you aren't British (but I could be ever so wrong xD) But it's November at the time the 5 split up, right? And then Matt is in a motel, in Glasgow, Scotland, with Air-con? You scarcely even get air-con in the UK... xD

Yeah, i think it's good so far xD
You mentioned a girl.. I'm jsut hoping it won't turn into a Mary-Sue fic but by the style of this so far, it doesn't seem to be heading that direction xD