 Aoi Maboroshii-Chan 2009-08-30 . chapter 2Sorry, I didn't notice that you already wrote some of it!
So far, it is pretty good. I like that you have a logical reason for Lettuce getting a bit of a personality change. Most stories they just randomly get new personalities for no reason. My only problem is, what happened to Aoyama? Though thats just a minor thing, it should be explained eventually for the story to work and make sense. Other than that, it was good.
Well, thanks for entering and I can't wait to read the next chapters! |