|Reviews for The Breath of Lies|
| xXxVampChicaxXx 6/10/13 . chapter 7
Day 307: Still have not lost hope of story continuation
Must remain determined and strong, for we will know how evil bitch and sadistic asshole will die
Determined to see plot unfold and couple reunited
We will not tire
We will not falter
And we will not give in
In other words, I still love the hell outta this story and I still have hope for it
Update, maybe soon?
| Reilly Black 5/30/13 . chapter 31
Hey will we ever see Sabin again? He was awesome :D. I hope he pops up in later chapters!
| Hijiki 5/29/13 . chapter 42
Where have you been all my life?
I tore through this whole thing in a day. Okay, a day and then a morning, but the point still stands that I couldn't put it down..! D'
.. or... close the page. Whatever.
Either way, your writing amazes me. Your characters enthrall me. And the plot is more delicious than anything I could have hoped for... [insert euphoria here]
I hate myself, just a bit, for loving it so much... guiltypleasurestoostrong.
Let's start this ooey, gooey, mushy, gushy, sore excuse for a review with Mira.
Starting with the obvious; I love her name. Even before I read this, I loved it. My own name is Maria, and.. truth be told, whenever I wanted to write about myself without actually -writingaboutmyself-, I'd always pick that name... while this has nothing to do with an unbiased review, hey. I still like her name.
Onto more important things than my fancy, I love her as a character. She isn't frail, or tries not to be, and is just bone-headed enough to weasel her way into the most divinely dangerous situations that a crazy vampire-obsessed teenage girl could desire.
My only complaint about Mira is that she really -is- the cause of a lot of pain, both to herself and to her peers. More so annoying is the pain she brings on herself with Daniel, but hey. It's a fun ride.
Not that I'm criticizing you as a writer, you're beautiful. But Mira as a person is adorkable. Emphasis on dork.
I see myself in her in many ways, which is great that she's relatable, but sometimes her wildness makes me cringe.. x ux [ I'm just rambling. I hope no one wastes their time reading this... ]
But, to sum up Mira, I'm glad she isn't a push over, I'm glad she fights harder than I would ever dare, and as a true main character, shows me that that's not exactly a bad thing. In fact, it was the only way she would have survived up until now. Kudos to Mira!
Isaac's a little devil... Maybe my masochistic friend has been telling me about too many of her dreams, but... I find myself much more attracted to his crazy side than his gentle side. If I were Mira, I would have made maaaany typical female mistakes, despite myself. I probably would have forgiven him a million times easier than she. I'm glad Mira puts him in his place when he steps over the line, and doesn't rest until he's made the proper apology. That's definitely something I'll take from this story.
Onto Sanura. Can I say, that I'm thankful to god that you didn't keep her as the evil bitch's pet? Can I say that I myself wouldn't have given Sanura that moment where she didn't despise Mira when they met that first day, and that you are a genius for doing so? And that I love you for developing her SO beautifully, and SO realistically?
In fact, ALL of your characters feel entirely real. So believable. It's... really amazing to me. This feels publishable. If I found this on a shelf, I would never guess that it originated as a FanFic. In truth, it's better than a number of books I've picked up off of a shelf... e uuuuue'
Now. Josep. Gimme a sec, I'm a little choked up... GOD HE WAS SO BEAUTIFUL. I'm gonna cry. One moment. I might not be entirely certain how to pronounce his name, but I freaking ADORE his existence. Everything about him is warming, and best friend worthy. You know. Aside from the baby eating thing. But I hate kids, anyways!
... is it wrong to find him all the more alluring due to his peculiar appetite? I think it probably is. I should get that checked.
And is it wrong to find Daniel attractive for his choice in unwilling bedmates? Yeah. I should probably get that checked out while I'm at it. And avoid the DaniSaac part of DeviantArt. Which I'm sure exists, by now.
... Daniel's a delicious bastard. I would love him, if it weren't for him mutilating my baby. And by that, I mean Mira and Sanura. And by that, I mean I pretty much hate him in his entirety. And by that, I mean I'm entirely enthralled by his devilishness. Which is the mark of a good villain, in my opinion. The ability to make evil sexy. Isn't that why we like vampires? Why we're here in the first place? D':
Btw, kill the Bitch Queen. Please. Kill her with fire. Before she lays eggs.
I've been sick of her shit since chapter one [ not literally ]. Which is another mark of a good villain. Look at how good at this you are!
And it makes me wonder why vampires usually have queens? x'D
I approve, it makes me hate them a bit more than I would a sexy king. But hey. Female competitiveness in an audience that is mostly female [ I'm assuming ] is a good thing to draw on.
Anyhow. This is mostly my ramblings, and a bunch of ooey gooey compliments thrown in.
This story is amazing. And I pray to Cernunos [ see what I did there? ] that it receives and update before I die of longing to see Daniel torture Mir- I mean. See the Bitch Queen burn.
| Roses in December 5/27/13 . chapter 42
This is an amazing story and I really hope you update it soon! I think I'm in love with Isaac. Oh and I wouldn't mind seeing more of Sabin in some of your future stories! ;)
| Roozu Doll 5/14/13 . chapter 42
Love this chapter! Glad we could get to know Colette a little more now. She's actually pretty interesting. I feel bad for Mira because of Daniel's assaults, but maybe it'll toughen her up some more. ;) Haha, anyways, great story. I really hope you can update soon! You are an amazing writer with a great imagination. I can't get enough of this story!
| Xiu Ching 4/9/13 . chapter 1
Please please please tell me you are going to finish this story. I've been following since the early chapters and each update is like air pumping through my veins.
Wait. That sounded awful.
See that's the reason why I'm the reader and you're the author.
Please do update! And if you happen to publish it, do post a note on it, I'd LOVE to buy it just to finishing really!
| Guest15 3/25/13 . chapter 42
PLEEEAAAAASSSSE UPDATE! You're such an amazing writer, and I've fallen in love with this story. The way you weave words into such imagery is AWESOME. The characters are extremely compelling, and I just can't get enough of Isaac (if you know what I mean). I doubt Mira can either ;). I've been rereading everything for months, unable to stay away from your writing for very long. I hope you're doing well and won't give up on this amazing world you've created.
| Mia14-15 3/23/13 . chapter 42
I love this story!
| Miss Kristina 3/23/13 . chapter 42
Are you planning on finishing the story!? it is to god to stop! Please!
| VWH luv them all 3/19/13 . chapter 42
I forgot to review this chapter. I had been thinking about this story, hoping for an update. :/ I loved this chapter. You definitely have a talent in writing emotional scenes. I was close to tears when I was reading the reunion scene. I hope everyone makes it out alive. Except for Collete and Daniel. Please update soon. Don't give up on this beautiful story
| xXxVampChicaxXx 3/10/13 . chapter 12
I'm running out of chapters to review lol just letting you know u still have readers out here that are dying to read more
Hope you're okay
| maciaszaida 2/11/13 . chapter 1
Omg super awesome! I've grown to like sandura but I'm absolutely in love with Isaac! When's book 2? ;) 3
| stephanie 1/9/13 . chapter 1
Calamity, Please! please! please! post the next chapter! we are dying over here! I've been faithfully following your story since it started, and the long gaps between chapters are killing me! I'm begging you to end the agony and post another one. I really love your writing style, you are so creative, I've been hooked since the first chapter, keep it going! - steph
| xXxVampChicaxXx 12/26/12 . chapter 15
No Christmas present?
| padlocklol 12/12/12 . chapter 42
Hi how are you? i hope every thing is well. it has been awhile since you've updated and i'm starting to miss this story and i was just wondering if you have drop this story because that would be a shame because i really thought it was getting good. Even if Mira is not going to fall for the God (sad face) is he going to save her before it's too late ? I hope the God can do something for her finger, and what is the ring for ? and is Issac really the right person for her ? because of all he has done, killing her family, hurting her but the God hasn't really done that much other than taking away her light and not coming to her when she calls for help (when she's in danger) but if you think about it the God left her to Issac so it's Issac to make sure she's out of danger also she keeps putting her self in danger then calling for him and when he dosen't come then she blames him is she forgetting that he is a God he has other responsibility. Any way i hope you update soon can't wait to read more of this story