This story is getting more and more interesting. The Tholians have something buried deep down in an asteroid. That sounds oddly familier. It can't wait to find out what it is!

It's a testament to the realism of Star Trek (and THERE'S a phrase that's going to come back to bite me in about five seconds) that they never really got the envirosuits to be comfortable. I imagine the ones on "Enterprise" are even closer kin to our current ones, and I don't even like to think about those. (Although if wearing one would be the price to pay to go out into space...I'd wear it all week.)
I love those smiles of Phlox's. First time I saw it, practically jumped through the ceiling, but it's a cool effect.
Oh, and by the way, Janeway sounds like herself again. Well done. I read the pages with her deliberately listening for her voice, and I could 'hear' it. So you've got that working again, in my opinion.
I think Starfleet started installing extra chairs on the bridge because of McCoy. I think Kirk called and complained; some day I'm going to try to write that letter just to see what it would sound like. He's ALWAYS hanging around up there!
Whoa! I'd forgotten how HARD Kirk lunges into things! Not exactly tryingt to be friendly, is he? If he annoys the Tholians too much it'll be like kicking an anthill...alhtough is uppose that would give NX-01 a free field...hm...
I don't think you're quote justified in calling McCoy's "disapproval" "unexpected". McCoy's always sniping at Spock. It's one of those reliable McCoy things and shouldn't be unexpected by now.
Love Kirk's statement about the THIRD blow. That's quite an aphorism!
Oh, good plan, Kirk! Ha. I'm trying to remember that this WAS the plan, but it's hard. "Don't get your ships hurt" is one of those fundamental Starfleet things that I think viewers pick up on really fast. Ever flinch when Voyager/one of the Enterprises/the Defiant gets shot at? (I do that all the time.) I keep thinking 'oh no oh no oh no!'
Oh, and that's very good reasoning that the Tholians would improve their tactics. Very logical--and gives you a whole new ability to play with, huh?
And lastly: Happy Thanksgiving! Time to relax and hang out with family; hope you have a great holiday!

Personally, I can live with the Borg panicking. The words 'so there' keep floating through my mind.
There's something bothering me about the way this Kirk talks. Perhaps it's that he's so freely calling Picard 'Jean-Luc', but he never says 'Spock'. He keeps saying 'my former First Officer...' etc etc. I noticed it a bit in Dark Archon too, but he's still doing it. It just sounds odd.
On the other hand, Ingram saying "puh-lenty of strange new worlds" gives her a wonderfully real voice!
Listening to Nelson talk about what would happen if the Omega particles detonated--destroying subspace and making warp drive impossible--I'm thinking "Force of Nature" and the Hekaras Corridor. If a Timeship is going to get blown up at any point...could it be there?
"the towel rod"! Ha! Now I can see it perfectly! What did you do, run down to the kitchen and look around for anything that might look like it could fly? You know, a stapler was the Caretaker's array for about a minute once!
What's the Christopher Pike tactical combat scale? Should I be looking that up? 'Cause it's not in my Treklopedia.
For this story, I find myself surprisingly concerned about one thing that you might want to think about: character development. You're devoting a lot of screen time to Data (less so in this chapter, but he's still a major character)...but where can the character go from here? Right from the beginning, we empathized with Data because he wanted to be human. Now he's essentially a god. Now what? Ducane is growing, Archer and his crew are learning, but Data?
Just a thought.

Ouch! When you put it that way--a choice between siding with Soran, who is Changing History (or planning to, at least. Somehow I don't see this going well) and siding with THE BORG...now that introduces some shades of grey! I am highly tempted to lock them in a warp-bubble universe and let them fight each other, but that would be a very short story! Besides, has anyone SEEN the Traveler lately?
Wow! Definite "Cause and Effect"...er...effect there! It really threw me for a second--I admit to scrolling back up to check that the dates were the same!
There's a serious hole in Soran's logic, especially his claims that Earth and the human race are safe behind the borders. Wolf 359 springs to mind (as does First Contact, come to think of it)--and it's only because the Enterprise-D (and -E) crew rose to the challenge that Earth survived. I'll bet anything that the El-Aurians didn't have an active star fleet, even though I'll bet just as much that they knew there were dangers out there. Seems to me it's THEM he needs to go talk to!
Just want to say: thank you for converting the Kelvin temperature readings. I know intellectually that 450 degrees K is HOT...but I probably woudn't have bothered to convert it mentally. (that's MATH...)
Hm...I can see the Tholians using humanoids for slave labor (purely from a practical point of view). I don't imagine that Tholians wear space suits very well, for one.
Oh, McCoy, this is Kirk's Enterprise! All sorts of plans hinge on 'hoping it works'!
"Risk is our business"! Isn't it Janeway who says that? No, sorry, that's "weird is part of the job". Someone says "risk is our business", though...ah, I'll remember who later.
Ooh. Plans. How can they go BOOM today? Can't WAIT to see how this point of view ties in with Archer's Enterprise.
Oh, and you tied in the title REALLY well. Actually managed to use it in dialogue. Well, in translation, but Soran quoting things in Latin would have been just weird. Bad weird, not good weird.

Another good chapter. I liked the time-loop-thing that you used. When I first read it, I thought you had accedently pasted that scene twice (I have actually seen people do that before). Naturally, you proved me wrong. I can't wait to see what happens next.

What is it about a good time travel story that gets my heart racing with excitement? Is it trying to understand all of the various paradoxes? Is it seeing characters from different times coming together? Probably a little bit of both. That's what I love about your stories. Very few people can master the intricacies of using time travel as a plot device like you.
You have to wonder why you never see the sling-shot method used in any of the other Trek series. My guess is that it (like the Guardian of Forever) is highly classified.
I can't wait to see what happens next!

Ah, the wonderful Starfleet suspicion. Good for them! I like all the "Enterprise" bridge crew's reactions to Data--very genuine. Frankly, if I were Trip, or Hoshi, I wouldn't believe Data EITHER.
Congratulations! You've managed to find a planet that exists in the Trekiverse, but we haven't seen much of (without going off to the Delta Quadrant)!
Oh, no! Not the loop-round-the-sun thing! The last time we saw that done, it was in an old Klingon ship! (And it got us a rather silly, but admittedly fun, movie.) I was reading a DS9 novel series a couple weeks ago--"Millennium" books 1, 2, and 3: GOOD books, that draw on all of DS9's seven seasons--that talked about that time-travel technique. And now I can't REMEMBER the terms they used...and I don't have the books with me. The only term I do remember is the 'path' established by such a maneuver that ships have to follow exactly to get back where they came from. The Reeves-Stevens (the authors) called it a Feynman curve.
Ouch! Good luck, T'Pol! It's brave of her...and incredibly 'logical', of course. This should be interesting...
Is it possible that Soren's quest to destroy the Borg will give them the very technology they need to become even more powerful? Oh! Wow! Irony! (I really hope I'm wrong. The last thing anyone wants is for the Borg to get their hands (or pincers...or whatever) on Preserver technology. That would be especially ironic, as a couple of writers (coughcoughShatnercough) have theorized that the Preservers were out to counteract the Borg. If I remember my books right.)
I know that "Enterprise" isn't going to blow up as they spiral around at warp (that would seriously inhibit the story) but I'm still nervous! I don't remember which episode of "Voyager" it is, but Tom Paris says that the first thing everyone learns about warp travel is "faster than light, no left or right". And it's stuck in my head.
Aw, yeah! Let the crossing-over begin! Two of my favorite people have just reappeared! Well...continue, I suppose, although I'm not sure if Captain Data counts as a crossover from TNG or an invention of yours.
At this point, I doubt it matters, really.
Wait a second...wait a second. 2268? (Dives for Treklopedia) Oh my gosh, that's "Tholian Web", isn't it? It is! It is! Aw, MAN! (is laughing) That's a GREAT distraction! No wonder the Tholians won't pay "Enterprise"...well, THIS "Enterprise" any attention.
Although I"ll be very surprised if it goes that smoothly. y'know. Because.
It IS the "Enterprise"! (howls with laughter) That's just BEAUTIFUL!
(appreciates extra socks)
(goes back to howling)

So it's DS9 episode titles in this installment, eh?

Something I've noticed about Trek fiction - it's pretty widely agreed that DS9 was the best of the Trek series, with TNG a close second... But the BEST fanfic seems to be either Voyager or Enterprise themed fic... Aside from you, very few authors can write very good TNG or DS9 fiction because the characters were so strong on-screen that they're difficult to improve upon... Still, I sort of cringe when I read a lot of Enterprise fic because even though there is so much material to work with, so much of it seems to end up just like the series - flat.

Not so in this case.

Your greatest skill is taking aspects of the future you've created, as well as bits from prior installments in this series and working them into a storyline in the time frame of the series that each installment focuses on without those future bits overpowering what's going on in the here-and-now.

You are also extremely good at pulling something out of TOS that wasn't really that interesting (Landru) and giving it new life.

Now, as to what seems to be your main storyline, Veller and his civilization... Well, at first I thought this was going to wind up as the proverbial C-plot, and wouldn't be all that interesting... I think I was basing that on the fact that the computer god was based on Landru... I'm glad you were able to prove me wrong, because that whole plot is an amazing psychodrama... Its like Videodrome if Videodrome hadn't been boring as hell! I actually feel like I'm watching the fall and rise of a civilization as though its Civilization: Call to Power, and Veller is the player. Its hard to fathom how a person could have the power he has and be so seemingly moral as to realize that using it the way the Sentinel wants him to use it is wrong. He's being torn apart mentally and it makes for great reading - especially in this current chapter, where they basically re-enact 1984!

And I have to admit, when I first started reading I never saw the twist at the end coming, with Veller's species becoming "Species 01" of the Borg...

This is off to a fantastic start... Keep up the good work!

That's a really cool title. It was cool then, it fits now! Good choice! (You do, admittedly, have a wider field of choice for this story's titles.)
Ah...I'm getting a bad feeling about this Kalita woman. An image appears from my memory...and my imagination adds hair and a body. Uh oh...
Ew...ew...I LOVE the rationale you've created for them as they create the beginnings of the Hive-mind--just because it makes so much SENSE--but my skin's crawling. Really. There are goosebumps. And yes, that is a compliment to your powers of description. But...ew...
"He didn’t have a better plan, and so he reluctantly agreed." I think this sentence, right here, is the core of what's going wrong in this story (for them. Plot- and writing-wise, it's soaring.) In fact, this sentiment may be at the heart of a lot of our modern-day and historical problems: no one suggests a better option, and some truly horrible things go down. ...I guess this means you've hit the 'subtle social message/reflection' Star Trek button. Good job!
Woah...Ok. I'm just going to stop now and find some socks so they can be knocked off...I don't have any socks, as it happens. METAPHORICAL socks, then, are flying across the room and rebounding off walls. Because I NEVER would have thought to connect "Return of the Archons" with the Borg. NEVER. And even if I had, I don't know ANYONE else who could have connected and developed it so well. About my skin crawling? It's still doing it.
(snicker) Yeah, Kathryn Janeway! You rock! (I did quite a lot of evil laughing during 'Endgame'. I always found it amusing that Janeway irritated the Borg Queen so much. Turned out there was a good reason...but watching it was FUN.
I don't know if Soran would think of easy things as 'a piece of cake'. That one phrase just jumped out at me. Yeah, he would probably know it, but it doesn't sound like a colloquialism he would use.
Did you invent the Krell, or are they from "Enterprise"? Either way, they're really cool (and easy to see in my head. Heh.)
Sounds like Soran's building the Doomsday Machine--only spherical. That was apparently made to go after the Borg, too...only it never got there. Kirk and Decker blew it up first. Oh well...they couldn't have known, and it WAS heading through the Federation.
Now that I think of it...freeing drones would probably tick the Queen off even than the destruction of cubes and spheres. (Do the Borg have pyramid ships? That would be WEIRD, bur really, really cool.) If Soran can figure out a way to do that, we'll be golden. Yep.

Another great chapter. I like your version of the origin of the Borg. You know, Pocket Books recently released a trio of books that featured the origin of the Borg, but their version seemed rather... messy. There were way to many coincidences. But your version seems much more believable. Keep up the good work!

Another wonderful chapter. Though this is the first time that I have reviewed one of your stories, I have read them all, and I have loved them all, especially Dark Archon (I really wish there were more Star Trek crossovers like that out there). From what I have seen so far, this story looks like it going to be a truly astonding finaly.

As for this specific chapter, I can't help that there's more to this than a simple robbery. I can't wait to find out.

Oh, good quotes, good quotes! No matter what your personal beliefs about the Bible, there's no denying that the poetry is gorgeous.
One of the things I quite liked about "Enterprise" was that humans and Starfleet weren't the big kids with the biggest sticks, running the show. They had to learn to cooperate and volunteer to help--and were sometimes a bit overwhelmed by the big universe out there! I felt it was a more realistic image of the future. Although the TOS/TNG idea that we're the big kids IS more reassuring!
Hoshi with a pistol is an interesting image. Somehow I always see her as the one in the middle, bent over the tricorder working. But maybe I just didn't see enough of "Enterprise"... I have seen enough, though, to know to never underestimate Star Trek characters! They survive by surprising you.
Heehee, Hoshi's got a Bluetooth!
I know you're working really hard here to expand the Star Trek universe, but it's always nice to see our old familiar cast members. For one thing, it's much, much easier to watch in my head! And, after all, they're what bring readers to fanfiction--the chance to see more of their favorite people.
On that note, I'm glad to see that the "Enterprise" crew gets to play a more central role this story! Since they're not contemporaneous with TNG/DS9/VGR, I realize it's harder to bring them into the main story instead of creating side stories or prologues. (Except for, okay, Columbia.)
And there's Data! Fantastic. Hmm...the original Data was a cat-person (if anything, that should convince any doubters that he's as much a person as anyone. How many machines are cat-people?). I wonder what he'll think of Porthos?

Time setting: Armageddeon, Day One. Hah! I like it!
If Veller's world is meant to be reminiscent of Earth That Could Be...it works! And oh, we could get there, and God forbid we do! One of the things I like most about Star Trek is that we get episodes and storylines that are warnings about what could be, and what shouldn't be--and if we can recognize it in fiction, maybe we can learn to recognize and avert it in real life. ...Now, admittedly, sometimes Star Trek overdoes it, and it's like being beaten over the head by a sandwich board...but it's worth it for the ones they (and you) get right.
Coliseum...Le'letha's going to briefly obsess about names again...and judge it good! Lots of connotations.
I don't think I LIKE the Preservers' solution in the case of Veller's World...it sends chills down my spine. Just...ugh! They could at least ASK. I know, I know, when a planet's just blown itself half to shards it's not really possible to take a vote, but that's just wrong. It seems to me that the Preservers aren't really devoted to preserving life in all its forms, just life the way they think it should be. Part of being 'human'/sentient is choosing whether you're going to live or not. Otherwise we're just sheep.
Ooh, Star Trek philosophy, eh?
And the Borg. Good theory. I look forward to seeing it develop. Personally, my favorite theory is from a Strange New Worlds story, I forget which one, that told about a whole culture that became gradually more and more dependent on their computers. I was very leery of the Internet for a couple of weeks. ...Want to know something scary? One of the founders of Google once said that we'd be better off if we had "all the world's information directly attached to your brain, or an artificial brain that was smarter than your brain". (I've got my textbook open next to me.) Brr! Someone over in Google Headquarters doesn't watch enough Star Trek.

Hi.
Though I have not reviewed before, I have read all of your stories you have written thus far. I enjoy how you manage to tie everything together in an intricate web, weather by design or thought as you go. Your writing style and story plots are certainly superior to my own, and reading your stories gives me insite on what I could possibly do to improve my own writing.

I have read through your stories various times, and each time, I pick out something new that I didn't see before. The stories themselves certainly seem eligant and well-rounded, containing elements that make the story have a well-written plot, and elements of humor and actions of characters that may not be directly related to the story line. I particularly enjoy this, as it gives you a break from the reprieve of reading the actual action, helps you to think ahead and wonder what, exactly, is going to happen next.

I have noted that each story seems to move backward in the timeline of StarTrek, but also moves forward for the characters in the twenty-ninth century. It's not anything I've seen before, but explains the concept of time in a rather fascinating way. I can't quite figure out how to describe the effect you've portrayed, but there is probably a rather simplistic way of describing it.

I'm curious to know how this particular story is going to play out, and if there is another story, will it take place further back in the timeline or not? Although, the concept of when and where something takes place, especially in your stories, doesn't quite seem to exist. Something could take place anywhere and anywhen, as was the case with Star Trek: Dark Archon.

Your stories seem creative but logical and well-designed. I certainly won't complain if an update takes a week, month, or even a year, as I know you will come out with something simplistic, and probably not thought of by most to bring the story to its conclusion. You are one of the more tallented writers I've read stories from, and I encourage you to continue writing.

I can't wait for the next chapter. Will Captain Archer realize what's happening, or will intervention be required by the parties from the future? After all, the story could continue to near the end, and once the people in the future realize where he is, they could stop him before he even began his plan, although, that might create a paradox, or, perhaps, an alternate universe. Of course, should that occur, would he be stopped in the alternate universe, or would no one intervean from the future? I'm also curious to know how the temporal traps will play out, what the relativity will have to contend with. Correcting the timeline as they move backward through time makes perfect sense, as the good, or bad Doctor, as it were, would have already made the changes to the timeline. Stopping him in the past wouldn't correct the mistakes, as the Doctor's past self would have already made the changes to the timeline in the future. it's quite fascinating to think about.

I await the next chapter. Good luck, and have fun!

Hey, hey, hey...you ARE back! And you're already taking off at warp speed, I see. I'm not surprised (but am pleased...) I look forward to coming along for the ride. This looks as ambitious and fun as the first four.
"Past Prologue", indeed. That was a good episode; it was bold of DS9 to spend their first standalone episode focusing on a Bajoran story rather than a Starfleet one.
Keeping the timelines of these stories in order always threatens to give me a headache...with Soran setting out to deliberately mess with them it looks like I'd better stock up my medicine cabinet. (Or steal one of McCoy's hyposprays.)
(applauds) Good to have you back writing again!