Awesome. Write more...WRITE MORE! I thought no one knew about Der Mond Evangelian. Your great!

Screech and Luna Belaqua

Very someone volunteers , I'm ready to check the grammar of the story, I actually have no one to do it.

This needs work. The grammar and spelling need to be checked, and you might want to check into having someone look over your drafts before posting. Also, about the plot-much like many who have read this, I was expecting Asuka to be the object of affection and not Rei. Having Rei used in Asuka's stead might have been all right had some explanation been given; however, the fic simply jumped-in without saying why it was the way it was. Just some advice.

I agree with the review below, I thought it would have been Asuka for the same reasons. Certainly surprised me, but I thoguht it kinda made the fanfic better, what with the small surprises and all. This is good, might need to refine it, but it's nice, in a subtle, 'clam' sort of way. Keep up the good work!)

This fic needs help. It needs a lot of work on the grammar and description. I was expecting suka because she was the only one left aside from Shinji after third Impact. I'm not saying that part is bad, but I dont see how it goes. You also need to get someone to look over your work for you. That's just a good thing to do.

This was pretty good, aside from really bad grammar but that can be fixed with pre-readers which no one seems to use anymore. Wasn't expecting it to be Rei instead of Asuka, missed the whole 'eyes are luminous pools of red'. Needs touch ups but its quite good none the less.

short and sweet. I hope to see more of ur work around here.

That was beautiful! _

Well done. You don't normally see such good work in such a short story. Please write another story or use this as a prologue to a longer post TI story. this I want to see!

Excellent!