Okay, I'll be honest with you on your story, Man. I know that I've favored your story on DA, but here I could give you a better review. So here it is.

Now I'll be honest with you man, you've actually didn't do a lot in this story. You kept it simple rather than go into deep detail but that's good in its own way. Also you've done what most people in this site have been doing for this sort of pairing since posting this story. The simple Sheena confesses her love to Lloyd thing has really been done to death, but you did something to make up for it in the beginning. Not only that you've got Zelos into egging Sheena to confess her feelings to our favorite red clad swordsman but Kratos suddenly appearing to help move things along. Of course it's the very thought that has got the story started in the first place. I've got to say that it's a good thing that you've started a fic with both Lloyd and Sheena right about to kiss one another right before Kratos intervened.

Okay, now I'll be honest that this story wasn't exactly what I've expected for when I first read your story on DA, but to be honest, it's actually something that's a good break from what I have been used to. It's a real laugh for when the female ninja is flustered for when both Zelos and Kratos inquire on her love for Lloyd as well as try to help her with getting it off her chest by setting both her and Lloyd together on a sort of date. Glad it ended the way that it did. Despite some things that I found in it, it's actually something that I've wanted to read in a long time. Thanks for the read and I hope that you didn't take this too hard for all I'm saying is the truth and I give what I can to those who deserve it. Thank you and hope that you come up with something else in the future. Later!

Maurice A. Nigma
The Great Blue One

Not my favorite story I'm afraid. It's decent at best. However, it was still a nice way to kill a few minutes of time, so I thank you. Fairly nice story.



~Sy

Didn't really like the conversations between Sheena and Zelos... Just seemed off to me. Ah well, 'til next chapter I suppose...


~Sy

Nice chapter... yada yada yada... I'm going to sleep now...



~Sy

Very nice beginning. And the subtle-ness of the love triangle forming was a nice touch. On a different note: YAY! KRATOS!

Well... other than what would seem like Kratos appearing randomly out of nowhere oddly right after they were wondering if he would come back... It wasn't too bad.



~Sy