Oh, wow! *tears fall* My poor, beloved James! I'll take you! :_o(

Great imagery, my dear.

— Silver

That was beautifully done and very touching!

I adored this line: "He wanted to be like the sea; as free as the sea; as strong as the sea; as unfeeling as the sea..." Very clever and dreadfully in-character.

You really made my heart go out to him. The necklace was a lovely touch and heart-breaking that now he could never give it to her.

Very moving.

Keep writing!

Damsel :)

Wow that was great, very moving. I wish he did give her the necklace, perhaps you could write one that he actually did.

Very good. Poor James. He doesn't deserve all the horrors he had to go through. :)

But the very last line doesn't fit the rest of the story very well. It feels like the author just wanted to end the story some way.

"That night, he decided, and the nights following, he would fall asleep tear-soaked."

You might want to rewrite just that one line. But the rest of the story was good. :)

Keep writing!

Aubrey

Oh, dear. I am always feeling sorry for poor Norrington- he got worse than he deserved in every movie.

(Off to read some fanfiction where he has a happier ending...)