|Reviews for Improviso Vir|
| Thought Cloud 5/6/10 . chapter 14
Feels... so familiar... ;_;
| GirlofNinten 5/1/10 . chapter 14
I can't even discribe it with words. I can't grasp the true form of your writing, because it is so awesome. Wow. Good luck with writing. ;-)
I'm so bad at making puns. -.-
| streetfighter246 2/9/10 . chapter 13
| Thought Cloud 2/2/10 . chapter 13
Gr... everyone's a critic...
His dad must do it, too. Can Lucas be himself, again?
| Nonakani 1/31/10 . chapter 13
Why hello there, new vignette! :D
Very nice, too - short and to the point. Lucas no longer has that single, non-judging factor; now he can only be what others think of him as, in his own little bubble of sadness - a crybaby.
| Thought Cloud 1/21/10 . chapter 12
Lucas has the best angst stories ever. I love Lucas & co.'s personalities. And also the chapter titles- they have the name of emotions! Wow... it's just like Giygas unable to control his/her/its feelings.
| Nonakani 10/16/09 . chapter 11
I liked both of these, but especially the second one - I can totally imagine Lucas hearing the Masked Man's silent plea, something that even he himself isn't aware of.
The smile at the end, and Lucas's reaction to it, are interesting, too. Once again, you continue to write wonderful little snippets of events, possible and actual, that very few have gravitated toward writing before. :)
| KamirouBa 10/10/09 . chapter 9
This one was nice.
You could feel the heaviness that Lucas was feeling. And despite everything, those last words... The light at the end of this dark, long, and traumatic tunnel..! *smile*
| Nonakani 10/10/09 . chapter 9
I liked this one. :3 This is the type of Lucas that would end up destroying the world, I think - a Lucas that too deeply believed in Pokey's words, that his brother was entirely a robot.
Great stuff, as usual. :)
| Nonakani 10/2/09 . chapter 8
Nothing like leading your son off a cliff to show that you love them, right? ;D
But in all seriousness, I like how you portrayed this scene - Lucas's "Say something, please?" sounded fantastically desperate in my mind, which is awesome. :D
| Nonakani 9/26/09 . chapter 7
And that's exactly how I imagined it, so awesome. 8D
I like how you used this situation in the story for the characters to solve a problem, rather than as just an entire chapter about listening. (Not that I would've minded. ;D )
| Nonakani 9/25/09 . chapter 6
There was just a bit too much drifting for my liking here - thee story starts off with Lucas being able to hear the earth (which is awesome, by the way, and something that I always imagined him being able to do), and though that's the reason I assume he's till awake, it ends up not really going anywhere, and the story suddenly becomes about Lucas and Kumatora's interactions.
But still, other than that error in structure, this was very well written, as usual. :)
| KamirouBa 9/20/09 . chapter 5
angst or not, well.. it's good to have both, heheh.
the way these last two ended felt a bit abrupt, tho. But maybe that's just me..
I mean, I wasn't sure what to make of the end. Not sure exactly what was really their point. But if you say you'll be continuing the Dragon part, maybe it'll make more sense to me later on
| Nonakani 9/19/09 . chapter 5
It's interesting that you actually chose to describe the dragon, even if only a little - is it how you actually imagine the dragon, or how it had to appear in this story alone?
But yeah - the whole mass destruction thing after Lucas pulls the needle does make it seem like it was an immediately bad decision, huh?...
| Huggawugga2 9/12/09 . chapter 4
WHY HAVEN'T I FAVORITED THIS YET?
Anyway, great job! I love Lucas' character; He's exactly how I imagined him. Keep writing! I look forward to more chapters!
As for inspirational words: embarrassment, numb, crush (both meanings), shyness, exhaustion, and love are all i can think of for now.