It was short but complete (unlike this so-called review). You grammar was pretty good, too. :)

wow so sad and so beautiful, thank you, i really wish clamp would have done this scene, but alas tehy didn't...good luck for your others stories!

Sighs ... I don't think I can take Watanuki crying anymore, and I so wished when I read the manga that Doumeki would do exactly what you have written.

At the beginning you sentences were a bit difficult to read but at the end it became a lot more fluent!

I remember reading this chapter of xHolic and the look on Doumeki's face as Watanuki told that he couldn't leave the shop just broke my heart and confirmed how much he truly cares for him. Excellent job extended/embellishing this particular moment.

Oh, I wished this had happened, instead of pure angst. You wrote a lovely little piece here. Bravo.

Wonderful

At that moment in the manga, I was WAITING for this. Either a hug or a punch. I thought Doumeki would hug him or hit him, he looked so **. T__T

Wonderful story. Heart-wrenching and... and... You gave us the hug Clamp refuses to give us.

*sigh*...i wonder what doumeki's decision will be. whats the egg for?! *sigh*..just read tsubasa and somehow it looks like its nearing its end. wonder what will happen to xholic.