|Reviews for A skiing we will go|
| Ghostwriter 10/20/09 . chapter 1
Awesome. Love how you're portraying the characters, everyone's right on, it's like watchin' an ep. However, the format's a little choppy, making it hard to read. For example: ("I passed” Mike looks at him “Ben you made a C” Ben looks at him and smiles “But I made a C” Him and Luke start to walk out they hear luck talking from down stairs “Hey who spilt water on mine”). I would separate paragraphs so people know when somebody else is talking, it's "he and Luke", not "him and Luke", and you spelled Luke as luck in one sentence. But overall, great story. Keep it up. Catch ya on the flip side.