I WANT YOU TO TELL ME WHO ADOPTS THIS STORY! I would, but I don't think I could do your orriginal idea justice.

I think you should change the rating to T. It's not very gruesome. I know you have more planned, but just make it a high T. I promise you that this doesn't work as an M. Ever seen Lord of the Rings? Rated T. And people get smooshed. You are doing a fine job and I almost cried. Keep up the good work.

Hey, this is a really great story. You should update 8D

Pretty please with a cherry on top.

Also, is this only going to be letters? Or is the last chapter going to be like, 'Someone finds Harry and the letters' type of story?

I know that these are intended to be letters to various people and even back in the 90's, letter writing might not have been a priority. So many stories have Harry not doing well in school in order to not do better than Dudley so it is likely that Harry would make spelling and grammar mistakes.

That being said - the punctuation and spelling sometimes making these difficult. But I've obviously made it through...

As for possible suggestions for the next letters, I actually have three so maybe one will strike a spark. Snape, the Weasley twins or Madame Pomfrey.

I hope the next one will be written to Ginny! UPDATE SOON PLEASE!

you made me cry!

i love this though, it makes sence to tell them this, they deserve to know.

please updae soon.

Are these letters something he hopes will be found after his death, or will they actually get sent/snuck out and some of the recipients arrive to rescue him in the nick of time?

great story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.

"worm tails betrayal. "

Wormtail is a NAME, that means it should be capitalized. It is also only one word, not two.

"You my dear godfather tend to look back more than you look forward. "

The phrase 'my dear godfather' is a parenthetical expression (I know, big words there). this kind of phrase should always be set off with commas, e.g. 'You, my dear godfather, tend to look...'

Again, the formatting makes this a chore to read and it is littered with run-on sentences.

"I wasn't aloud to play with"

'Aloud' means voiced, like "He was reading aloud." If you want to say he wasn't permitted to play with other kids, you need to use the word 'allowed'.

"your one of the first ones in it"

"Your" is possessive. The correct word for 'you are' is the contraction "you're", you should have learned this is second grade.

This chapter was much more poorly written than the last one. There were many run-on sentences and you don't seem to have any idea about when to use commas (hint: you have used to few). The formatting in this letter is very difficult to read. Having one huge paragraph makes it hard to track which line you are reading. You should format it like you did in the first one.

Wonderfully written. I cant wait to see more. Especially if he writes Snape and Fred and George. I hope that Harry doesn't die, but that everyone can help him. Thank you.

I hope you make this into a story write their reactions

Very good.

thank you for the update. these are so sad i cried all the way through them. after you're done with the letters please write about peoples reaction to them.

omg congrats it was brill. i cried during sirius was very well you continue to write more in the future.