Great story. What happened though? How did Danny die? Was he in Phantom form?

Ah. Somewhat AU, but very possible.
Although, then, the half human thingy doesn't really - ah. Wait. ...Oh. Now I get it.

Wow. That was...intense.

I loved the way it started out so innocuously--just a trip to the Fenton's lab, just another day of Dash being an idiot and Danny being Danny--but the big reveal at the end was both creepy and brilliant.

WOAH. just, WOAH. i don't know what to say! amazing! O_O

Oh, sweet. I had wondered when you'd write a DP story. ^^ So, I am glad to see one from you xD Anyway, I really enjoyed the story. It had a nice, eerie feel to it. The whole time I read it, I KNEW something bad was coming *dun dun dun* So that was very cool.

Very cool idea. I loved the ending to it all. Great work, thanks for taking the time to write it and post it so people like me can read it!

What?! Danny doesn't have street cred?! Since when?! ;) LOL! Awesomeness!

Its an interesting take on the portal accident that I've never seen explored before, great job!

I am officially freaked out, and loving it.

This really brings home what it means to be half-dead- despite the fact that yeah, he is fully dead here. Especially liked the final part, when he accepts his death.

Even after reading this several times over, it still gives me a chill down my spine. Thanks for this, and for bringing the feeling of death closer to me. (...Okay, that sounded weird. But if it helps, I rely a lot on feelings to help me write.)

Whoa...I totally was not expecting that. The way Dash acted and the reality of the situation...I felt like I was watching an actual episode. Your descriptive abilities are stunning. I especilly like when Sam brought up the fact that Danny actually knows a word like pandemonium.

Wow, I was not expecting that ending. Excellent one-shot! It's a very sad piece though. Chilling but wonderfully written. You somehow managed to keep it lighthearted and even funny (very DP cannon feeling) in the beginning, and then you literally just threw that almost realistic horror at the end.
Thank you for this piece!

Interesting.

I still don't really understand what happened, but it was well written. :)

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Whoa. Awesome twist! I loved it! Although I still didn't expect the abrupt ending either. Hm. He was just totally dead then.

Weird.

I like your dark mind. ;)

Yikes that's a twist!

Pretty good, me likey! I liked your syntax (my English teacher would be so proud of me!) and your description was awesome.

Keep up the great writing! ^_^