Wow! I really like this, valentine. I really enjoyed reading it. It was interesting and fluent, not forgetting FUNNY! Definitely adding to my favourites. I agree with you that AF needs more romance/friendship-based fanfics.

~TheToastCrumb~

Ooh, cool :-) Lots of funnies in here. I loved this bit: 'And when Paulo asked her if she wanted to watch a more “girly” movie, she told him that he shouldn’t use her as a means to get what he wants.' I have to be honest; I find Zara a bit annoying in the fact that all three boys are automatically in love with her and 'she fit right in.' It seems a bit Mary-Sueish. OTher than that, I love Hex/Alex/Paulo time and you did it really well. And I can't wait to find out what it is about Amber! Is Hex's sercret finally going to be revealed? I loved the idea that Hex and Zara had, getting all the story objects for Ben, it was really sweet :-)
Well done!
Spinky.

Keep going! You left us with a cliffie, an' thats jus' mean!

Valentine :) How do you come up with these lines? 'You could never be one of her dwarfs.' (It should be 'dwarves' - but who cares?) It made me laugh lots. Anyway, great chapter, as always, and I'm not sure which girl I prefer - Emma or Zara? I'm guessing it's a rare thing for Hex to have a choice... :P Also loved the banter between the guys. We don't get enough guy bonding fics, probably because we're mostly girls and don't quite know how that works. Can't wait for the next :)
Spinky.

Awesome!
I liked Zara, and the Ben references. More would be awesome, but not nessesary.
Frankly, I enjoyed this more than the previous chapter - probably because some of AF are together again.
Looking forward for more
BNTN

The final part of that chapter was awesome. Loved the last line as well as: “I prefer her to Emma,” Alex said quickly, “Emma made you shut a door in my face while Zara undermined you at least three times in three minutes.” Interesting to see which characteristics in a person Alex values :P

It's a refreshing change to have a slower moving fic, but I definitely agree that the temptation to suddenly have the cafe blown up or have one of them disappear off the face of the earth would be very hard to supress and not act on. Kudos for holding out.

Zara's a great character and Alex's comment about her looking like Snow White coupled with your description has given me a very clear mental image. It's nice to see that Hex *does* have friends from outside of Alpha Force.

Can't wait to read more, valentine, so keep up the great work :D

The door-in-Alex's-face made me laugh hime ^ ^

Paulo the ladies man!

And Zara had me chuckling away.

I swear you most definitely have a talent for creating your OC's that instantly just seem to click right into whatever you're writing (yes, i know that's really the whole idea)

the phone call, your mum ^ ^
classic

I was a little perplexed at Alex's random outburst of calling her Snow White... ^ ^?

And Zara made me think of Gaara and the Gourd ^ ^ kekeke
Winn so far and shall most probably be win-ness in the next chapter.

Hi!
I've been having computer issues which was why I couldn't review earlier.
Pretty good, although you may want to check your grammar slightly more thouroughly.
Emmalea and Spinkle have said the rest, so I'm just shutting up now.
Keep it up
BNTN

Oh my gosh, this was hilarious! OK, so my favourite line in the whole fic was : 'who the heck likens girls to forms of precipitation?!' I'm not sure if it was intentional, but it was like Hex was trying to think cool things in spite of himself, and still comes up with words like 'precipitation.' Bless him. And I also love how he'll do anything to meet the girl, including shutting the door on his best friend who he hasn't seen for weeks. But not in a mean way - in an 'I'm sure you'll understand later' way. Woop! Go Hex! Can't wait for the next chapter. Hope Alex isn't too mad.
Spinky.

"Like a snowflake...as he thought about it he cringed- who the heck likens girls to forms of precipitation?!" My favourite line :D Just had to put that in quickly. This is off to an interesting start, Valentine, and yes, we do need more fics of this sort. I'll speak to my imagination on the matter, but as of yet it finds it difficult to come up with anything lacking... loads of drama. So I definitely admire you for having this idea and for writing it so well. Sometimes humour/romance fics can be as dull as ditch water, but this one is shaping up to be (as usual) brilliant. Looking forward to reading further chapters :)