very sweet. i love the harvey/pam interaction. :) keep up the good work.

DON'T give up on this! I know that there are a thousand and one stories you want to write, but this particular series is amazing, and you know it. Please don't genre hop again UNTIL YOU'VE FINISHED THIS–– it is wonderful so far: I can feel the tension building in my stomach every time you write about Poison Ivy or Joker, because you make the threat they represent so real, and the characters so overwhelming. And I miss Harvey, I really do. She is a believable and sympathetic character, and your new narrator seems just as enthralling. I know it's hard to write when you feel you don't always have an audience but believe me, you do, and they really want to know how the story ends.

Thank you!
The Gnome

please update! this is great

I just finished reading your first chapter. I liked it enough that I intend to press onward with the rest of what you've already posted for this story, but first I want to nitpick zbout a few possible rough spots which occurred to me as I went along. Cases where I thought your meaning wasn't as clear as you probably hoped -- a wrong choice of words, or whatever?

(When I quote a passage from a story I'm reviewing, I put the quoted material inside asterisks -- * like this! * -- to make it easier to keep track of which words are yours and which are my commentary.)


* His case file states that he’s gone under several aliases (One obscure name in particular was an anagram for the words ‘Clever Pun’, and was also a state in Ohio. Really, how ridiculous?) *

"A state in Ohio"?

Ohio is one of the fifty states within the boundaries of the United States of America. There are no other states located "in Ohio." Offhand, I don't know what names you're talking about as anagrams, but perhaps you meant "a town" or "a county" in Ohio?


* The state he’s in, when they lead me to his cell, is positively ungainly. *

"Ungainly"? I think that word refers to being physically awkward, clumsy, uncoordinated; that sort of thing. (An online dictionary agrees with me -- I just checked.) I'm not sure that's what you really wanted to say about the Joker's appearance in this context, considering that you start talking about greasepaint and lipstick and so forth in the rest of that paragraph.


I also wondered: Why does Jeff, the guard, give the narrator "a withering look" on what I gather is her FIRST visit to the Joker's cell? What has Dr. Flynn done, at this early stage, to make Jeff have that sort of nasty attitude towards her? Or did you mean to describe the look differently?

Whew. Bet that was a mouthful to listen to and absorb while trying to keep a reign on your terror, despite the layer of glass between you and the madman. great job, love! keep up the good work.

I love you. Really. I love his reaction to the mention of Harvey.

Damn right you're vaguely mentioning Harvey. Like Afton's psychiatrist traits are so interesting to read.

Loved it!Can't wait to read their little talk about that!
Please, update soon!:)

The Dr. wants to talk about Harley with the Joker? I definately want to see how that goes. It doesn't seem like a topic that will endear her to him, especially since it takes the focus off himself and puts it onto another person whose not even present and whose NOT the Batman. A snarl-grin? Seems to be foreshadowing of how the conversation's gonna go. I like it and can't wait to see whats next.

Good chapter. very descriptive. Keep up the good work. :)

I love this so far. Can't wait for more babe!

I liked this story, but I do want to point something out. You've kind of written the Joker in a way to make him sound country. For example “If it ain’t a purty lil tootsie roll for me to roll ‘round. You’re the next shrink, ain’t ya?”
As I was reading that sentence, I heard a country voice in my head instead of The Joker. I'm not saying it to offend you or anything, but I'm just pointing it out. But all in all, good story. :)

great start, can't wait for more. :)

Ths great!I like it.Please update soon.:)