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Okay, I will give you a few tips here.:

1. Don't Itacacise and underline makes things harder to read.

On chapter 2 I noticed:

-at edge of camp-

Annie galloped up to Colton, Colton coughed in all of the dust and said “took Yah long enough” Annie replied “so what?”…

Should be more like:

-At edge of camp-

Annie galloped up to Colton. Colton coughed in all of the dust and said, “Took Yah long enough”

Annie replied “So what?”

I hope this helps you. I got a GTA/Gun crossover you may like.

GUYS NO UPDATES FOR AWHILE, I HAVE WRITERS BLOCK!

Are you ever going to update?

You're doing really well on this. Keep going.