I absolutely adore your story ... There's just one thing I don't like about it: that it's finished ... I think you should write more ... ;-)

Great story!

THX

God bless you!

Thara

Thanks for another posting - I really appreciate it. I am enjoying the slow evolution of Miss Parker - from a Centre worker/snitch into a living and breathing human being. It is baby steps right now, but that is okay, but it is finally happening. I am not sure that MP appreciates what is happening to herself, but she will have to learn to deal with it. Interesting and Emily and Margaret were able to get MP into the vehicle and during the bumpy ride is when she awakens and, of course, goes into attack (survival) mode. Margaret's calm mother voice did wonders here and MP has no choice except to go with the flow. So glad that she got out of the vehicle before it was spotted by the Center thereby giving Emily and Margaret a little more breathing room. Yep, sooner or later, it seems that the Centre catches everyone. But here that is okay: the two get away, MP is able to erase evidence and the fire is a sure way to rid any bigger possible evidence. Enjoyed MP's joke to Jarod about Raines nearly blowing up. Hope that Angelo keeps sending J any / all information so that J is able to keep on top of everything (he has a lot to juggle: MP, Murdock, Raines, the Centre activities!). Yep, MP is slowly but slowly returning to the land of warm and living people. And, Jarod is very glad for that because of his deep feelings for her. Hope that MP has more confidence in herself now that she relayed Margaret's message of love to Jarod. What a happy message. As always, I thank you so much for sharing your talent / work with us!! It is a great story - I will look for another posting soon.

Great - another posting! MP is on a nasty and personal mission. Talk about twisting things around! Very interesting that she makes several stupid moves in a row and thereby causes herself to be knocked out. I believe that there is a reason for everything - that is why MP is knocked out here and now. Very interesting the way that you switched from MP to J and then back and forth. Too bad that Murdock got away before, but it is a good thing that Mario Lopez is a reformed person. But things can turn around when good guy Jarod is around. Murdock's turn is quickly coming. Margaret and Emily are such pleasant, kind, gentle folk. MP can only benefit from being in their presence - she deserves some personal happy time and freedom from the evil and lies of the Centre. J had good backup - both the IRS and FBI. Murdock will be employed elsewhere for a while. I hope that MP benefits from being in the presence of Margaret and Emily. Maybe MP will be willing and able to make that turning point that J has always suggested to her. At least for the time being, MP has Peace and kindness. I really hope that she makes a decision to leave the Centre here and now - and then join Jarod who has waited a long time for her. Can't wait to see where the storyline goes from here. A great story. Thanks for sharing with us - look forward to more.

Hi just read your story it was very good. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Tone is very serious here: Sydney actually did have some knowledge of this Murdock, but it takes Angelo to help set the true context. Very worried about MP as she is with Murdock and Mr. C. The two are seriously after J and are willing to do whatever it takes - maybe kill MP and/or J. So, the culprit is Brigitte - no big surprise there. But it is a surprise that Mr. Parker let Sydney and Broots go to NYC to find out what they can - but they are likely being followed with Mr. Parker kept informed. Does Sydney have J's phone number? If so, then he could contact J. J is in real anguish now - hope that gets resolved and that J and MP get out safe and sound. Very interesting story line. Thanks for sharing.

MP is in serious trouble - and nobody knows where she is! Scary! J is deep into a case but he is very concerned about MP. I hope that J is able to make a connection between the two situations really soon and therefore help MP. How does that man know MP's mother? What does that man want J? More clues from you and more questions from me. Very interesting scenerio - can't wait to see how the two are connected. Thanks again for sharing your work with us. Waiting for more.

hehe...just like in the show - even though there's another plot going on (involving Miss P this time) , Jarod is still moving on with his next pretend.
Can't wait to see what happens to both!

thanks for the great story update!
glad they're ok, even though they're back to being runner and chaser :D
still love the kissing scene, of course!

Another strong and clear posting!! Good for you. Really liked your beginning: a clear and precise picture of exactly what Jarod had done (and why)just in case anybody missed it. MP was a little slow on the uptake, but that probably happens when one nearly dies and then is dramatically saved. Very plausible explanation of how Brigitte got shot - great save, Jarod!! Enjoyed immensely the scene between J and MP - just in case she wasn't sure of his feelings for her, now she clearly knows. When Brigitte regained consciousness, she posed a very good question: who indeed had called the hit on MP. Gives MP pause - I am wondering how she will find out - or if J will be the one to find out. J was very kind and clever when he took MP's gun. Good scene when MP is with Broots and Sydney. Loved her line, "No one's going to capture my Pretender, but me". So, I am wondering if she is claiming personal possession of him. Something for me to think more about. I am really, really enjoying this story. It is well structured and thoughtfully written. I also enjoy the persona of each character: they are true to the series. As always, thanks for sharing your work and your talent with us. Looking forward to another posting soon.

The last part was so god!
How can you leave us hanging like that? :D
Please, please, please continue very soon!

please continue this story! is beautiful and i think you are very very good! continue! please

great story

I am liking this story more and more because new and interesting ideas/people occur. That Guesstimator is one scary dude - because he reaches accurate conclusions. Glad that Jarod was able to right the wrong AND get away; if the Guesstimator is not pointed in another direction, Jarod may not get away the next time. Humble pie - cute! Glad that MP has resolve, but hope she never catches Jarod unless/until the two are alone and have escaped from the evilness of the Centre. Thanks for posting - looking forward to more!

Good, MP! Trying to find info to help Jarod - and EXCELLENT cover plan!! Good that Sydney was there, but especially good that Angelo is there and doing his thing!! So, did Angelo get the files/copied and then wiped them from the Centre database? On to Jarod - righting the wrong. Jarod is a true hero and good writers keep re-inventing the goodness of Jarod. Thanks for sharing - and looking for another posting soon.

Fantastic story!