I like how Zak is in character throughout the story, but the story needs more description in it.

One thing that I think would add to the story as a whole is a description of what the gadget looks like. If the readers knows what the item the characters are interacting with looks like, we can better relate to them. So is it a ball? Is it small? Large? Spikey? We know it's shiny, but we need more to it than that.

Another thing is I'm confused with the "recording" bit. Was the first part of the story just a simulation of what they'd do? Was it only the house blowing up in the video with the first part actually happening? If it was all a simulation, that's understandable, but if only the house blowing up was, then how did Zak and Fisk get to where their parents were?

The last thing is what happens in that one hour? If the gadget wasn't completed, how did it make the hole in the wall? Were they doing something else? It's very vague in the story.

It is a humorous story, and there's a lot that could be done with it, but just explain and describe actions and items more. This is most important for items that were never in the show, because the readers have never seen them and don't know what they are.

Also, add A/Ns at the end of the story, and refer to them with numbers or symbols instead. It helps make the story flow quicker, and doesn't pull you out of the story to read it.

Example: We went walking into a brown house.1

A/N- 1: the brown house was based on my house.

Simple things like that will get your story a lot more readers, and make it much more enjoyable for everyone :)

Good luck and keep writing!

Sounds like Zak

hahahaha great story

cute, though it is eerily similar to the episode of Danny Phantom lolz

i wasn't too much of a fan of this show (quite showing for me, kinda okay with it) but this is cute. also i have a question, who the heck is fiskerton? their cat?

That's hilarious! Keep up the good work. :D

The reason they have it in record Zak is because parents are weird. xD lol

hey! its me! :D love this fic, i would say you should make more stories like this, but if you did you wouldn't update howl of the wolf as offten.

SHINI ...UMM WHY IS IT GLOWIN AND IT SAID 10..9..8..AH IS A BOMB JUST KIDING LOVE THE STORY