Oh, God. Colette is perfect in this. So is Zelos. You did a wonderful job writing this, thank you so much.

Wow... Just wow. That was a really amazing shot, I love how you put both Colette and some of Zelos' jealousy into that without going too deep into the significant other's thoughts. It was just them at that moment, which really made it all the better. While I admit wholeheartedly to being a SheLloyd fangirl, I never really took the thought of Colette being the first one to knock on the door. (seeing as in mine, she's not even one of the three to remain behind) Your take on it, however, was much better than anything I could've come up with. Great work!

Sky

Wow. I just. Wow. I usually have some type of useful crit to give, but for once, nothing comes to mind. The way the story flowed.. you gave equal attention to both the actions and internal thoughts, which I feel a lot of writers neglect. Plus the characters were so spot on I would swear it came straight from the game.

Awesome story. ^^