nice i like it i think you could make a real story out of this it would be interesting )

Awesome!

*waiting for my next shopping trip*

jk.

LOL

You should keep this up.

very cute, i like little stories like this.

Nice :)

Haha, i get to read a superb story and i even get to me Edward and Jacob in a shopping mal.

SCORE! :)

This is cool. :)

-Random-

This is good, I liked it!

So where's Edward cullen and jacob? I didn't see them! LOL!

I like it. It'd be.. more interesting if you made this a story. Like at the end, she said that they weren't ordinary.. So she gets suspicious and all and somehow finds out.. I dont know, LOL. I just got that idea at the end if it were a story. Anyways, it was good (:

That was really good. I liked it. You should make one where Laruen saw Bella, Edward, and Nessie.