Did you mean to put King George as a character, not King Carney?

hi

very nicly done

You have lovely and vivid imagery and a real love of this land and these places, painting them for us with a loving hand.

I'm getting that you see these character for who and what they are but also as vehicles for telling a bigger story. Both are good stories and thus far are equally engaging.

Having read the notes on the other story you posted "Mission" I know you've struggled with finding Nullah's voice. I feel that you made a wise choice here to let the poetry of his speaking the language of his grandfather's language come through.

Nice work!