Whoah ! o.o It's really good, even though I don't really get it " (Am I stupid or my english is so bad ? TT) Did Axel actually shoot his dear Roxas or it's just an illusion ? Maybe the monster just wanted to trick Axel because it wished to kill him more easily 0.0 For me, this one-shot could be a very good multi-chaptered story

so mysterious... and really cool! Axel's the best. :)

Ohnoes... I wonder if it was really him, or just, as he thought, an illusion? Either way it's painful for Axel. I especially love the description of him freefalling; it really feels almost as if you're the one doing it yourself.

creepy. do you think the 'thing' read his heart and tried to find axels weakness hoping that he wouldnt be able to kill his so-called 'beloved' person? woah. long too bad! it didnt work. or maybe, roxas was 'haunting' axel? confusing, but very interesting! thanks for the mysterious fic!QQ

-le gasp- I don't get it. Did Axel just shoot Roxas or somebody who looked like him? What? This is really good but what happened to Roxas?

U must write more!X3

o! this is interesting. i love supernatural things and this is totally up my street

axel is the vanquisher C: that is cool! in a run down town he is the shining knight sort of thing :) evil beings are so evil, taking the form of someone dear to axel,Roxas. i like the description i got some ivid images that i was liking :) nice writing. i look forward to seeing where it goes :D

You've done it once again. I'm happy to gotten the oportunity to read another of your wonderful tales of both fantasy, mystery, gore and lot's more. I always get a smile on my lips when I see in the story list that you've posted yet another of your stories.

But it makes me wonder what happened to Roxas? Or have I missed something? I probably have. And I think I tried to read this story atleast three times only to have it say that there is no story with the id "5371451" (or whatever..) And I've had a bad week so it felt great that even more things doesn't want to do what I want them too. (Oh, my bad; it's not my month.. And to think that bad thing happened in September. Take just the 11:th. One year after the twin tower a very important Swedish woman got killed in a mall when she went shopping. She even had two boy that lots their mother because that a guy though he heard "Jesus" or something tell him to kill her. Insanity is never easy. Even I hear voices sometimes, but usually it's only memories for the ones near me. Like when I read a book I could hear my best friend read it for me in my head. But now it's mostly empty. My head I mean..)

Until next time our paths crosses!

-PD

I'm sorry if I temperarly killed you with my word-overload. After I had post it up I was like "holy sh*t!" and then I checked how many word it was and yeah, it was 638.. Whoops? I feel very bad about it and to be honest it was the most I've ever written to. Sorry for never be able to stop my ramlings. I hope that I haven't manage to scare you away yet. That would suck..