Oh I just love this! I cannot say that I like Onyx, but I do not detest him as much as I do before reading you fanfic. I mean, it is just loveable. Please update soon. I cannot wait to read the continuation. By the way, are you planning to stick to the game original stroy line where Griselda died? Hmm, I think as the time passed, Onyx will start to love Griselda. But when she died, perhaps he just pretend to love Gwendolyn in order to make Oswald jealous... Hmm... I wonder... perhaps Onyx is not the bad guy here... I mean, in your story.

This seems to get very interesting! I prefer OnyxXGwendolyn, but I can live with griselda, because you to get them together in a very good, and realistic way that everybody can understand.
Please continue this story! It's great!

:) Interesting premise. I think you characterized them both very well in that intro chapter. Hope the next installment comes soon!

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Very nice start! I think I like the idea of this couple, and it's got a lot of interesting places it can go. Griselda is a very dutiful daughter, but only, I suppose, to a point, and I like the sharpness of her dialogue. Very interested in reading more of this!