EPIC WIN IF I EVER SAW/READ ONE. ;D

I FOUND THE "TAKE IT" LINE AFTER READING IT AGAIN AND I THINK I LOVE YOU MORE.

AHAHA. *death* THAT WAS WAY TOO AWESOME FOR WORDS.

I LOVE YOU OH GOD. NKDJFKD THIS WAS JUST, IN SO MANY WAYS, AMAZING. FT.

"The buttery leather of his gloves--" Buttery leather. XD I LOL'd.

“Mello’s had years of practice, the man-slut.” HAHA. I LOVE YOUR MATT A LOT.

"She resisted the urge to clap a palm to her face. There were Autobots on them." That line made my entire day. YOU HAVE NO IDEA. I laughed so hard, omfg.

Omg. Omgomgomg. That was the HOTTEST thing I have read in a long time and DEAR GOD, I want to make this review longer, but my brain is currently out of order.

YOU CERTAINLY KNOW HOW TO WRITE PWP. *faints*

Nice. I thought it worked decently well. I mean, it felt realistic enough. As in, there were time when someone was almost an awkward third wheel, but hey... that's probably realistic enough. >.<' I love the Autobots boxers, though. That was a win.

I must say, it was awfully sexy, your pr0ns. And the final line, about them coming in threes, is kinda funny. Actually, I loled a little at that.

I wish I had more to say, though. But I haven't done anything with Death Note for a long time now, so I'm out of practice with it. I did enjoy Matt and Mello's interaction, though. As usual, your characters are very well done.

Thanks for the safe sex, btw. XD

Okay, that sound you just heard? Yeah, that was my frickin' BRAIN EXPLODING. Good god, woman. :O

Thank you so much for labeling this as "Mello and Halle" and not ruining the surprise. When Matt came out of the bathroom and said, "Tch. You started without me" I actually said "No effing way!" out loud, and I'm fairly certain I drooled a little.

From the very start I knew this one was going to be different. Those first three sentences were jarringly urgent and sexy and just _yes right now_--it set the tone very nicely. And Hal just grabbing Mello like that, and him letting her take charge for a moment? Rowwr. I also liked the little tidbit about the blouse and the tailor, lol.

Loved the description of Mello and his hot self on the bed:

"Nothing but his boots and his rosary. Sprawled across Hal's queen-sized like he owned it.

Hal swallowed, hard. This was certainly not your average evening."

You said it, sister. Cracked up when Hal tried to interrupt M&M's fervent kissing. "Aw, come on--you had a turn when I was in the bathroom." Ha!

The description of Mello's kisses was sublime. "Every time, he made her burn." Oh. Kill me with some dramatic irony, why don't you. :P

And just to remind everyone that Matt is a geek...AUTOBOTS. Hee.

Teh sex was all kinds of hot. Although Mello's demand for Hal to "take it" kind of made me giggle. Don't really think she was planning to resist any time soon Mello sweetie, heh.

Yes, the end was kind of weak, but since this was a PWP, who the hell cares? The boys' indignant responses to Hal mentioning Near was damn funny.

I've been waiting, hoping for someone to write this particular menage a trois and you did not disappoint. Bravo.

You probably deserve a longer review from me, but it's really late right now and I just wanted to leave you SOMETHING here at the end. Yeah, okay, I cracked up laughing through most of this. And I nearly DIED at the "...Take it" part. OH MY GAWD. I'm so happy that we have these wonderful inside jokes. Seriously, I laughed my ass off so that you-know-who had to ask me what I was doing. (Gah, I almost wrote a name there, but then remembered that it's not our thread, lol.) I can't believe you wrote that at ALL, but I seriously enjoyed it. I'm SO glad that you used your nervous energy for something that amazing.

Oh fine, criticism. Not your best work... it felt like you were trying too hard almost for most of it. There was a bit in the middle that I had to reread a few times to get a clear image of where all three were. Obviously it was a challenge to write for a myriad of reasons, and while you pulled it off decently (better than most I would think), it certainly doesn't stand a chance against most of your other sexploit stories. Er, those are pretty much just yaoi ones.

Haha, so yeah, speaking of yaoi, when I first started reading, I was like, what? Hal and Mello? Poor Matt... Because I'm a MandM fan, but I know you adore Hal. But then Matt shows up and I was like FUCK YES! THREESOME!

Congrats for writing it. XD

Criticism? How the hell could I criticize...THIS?! This master piece?! I loved every bit of it! XD

Don't underestimate safe sex lemons, btw. I remember one time I was at my gma's house, and I accidentally opened a lemon for Naruto (I didn't know what a lemon was at the time. My poor, innocent mind). Anyways, grandma saw it in the history later and READ IT. THEN SHE LECTURED ME ON SAFE SEX. Ah man. Most awkward thing ever. I was glad I could share the story with you?

Lol, anyway, glad to see some more DN stuff from you. You're definitely one of the most talented writers out there XD

I LOVE YOU THAT WAS HOT!! *feels loved*

Ah...Mello...AND Matt. WINWINWINWIN. This just reminds me of walking around the city with you and the random threesome with Matt and Mello comments. LOL...good times.

Anywho, I love when Matt and Mello are on the bed before Hal gets there. That was effing hot. I wanted to be Hal right there...(who wouldn't though?)

I think my favorite bit was your description of Mello's kisses. "Mello’s kisses were commanding, yet provided room for reaction. He took control, but granted ample freedom" That just seems so...Mello (unless he's just in the mood to TAKE control...which is also fun) But damn.

"Every time, he made her burn." I found that ironic, hot, and sad. I was like...burning, definitely...eff *flashback to Mello's death and Hal outside* That's just a good line. I like it :)

'“Pay attention to what’s in front of you,” Mello growled' I hope you know I died there. Melted. That was so Mello *squeal*

I find the clothes that stay on through this interesting. I dunno...makes it more frantic and hot.

*snort* AUtobot boxers. Oh Matt...

A-and t-then you had Mello...EFF! Yesh...that was a fun tidbit of powerplay in there. Made me happy *wink* (hehe...double entendres are fun)

AHAHAHA..."take it" indeed.

I love how in control Mello is in. It's so hot.

"She rendered him weak with an oral crescendo of lips, teeth, and tongue." Nice!

'“Toy-obsessed bitch doesn’t even know where his own dick is.”' I died. That was hilarious.

LOL..."come in threes" Win.

That was so hot...I loved it.

*snicker* Way to make Matt uke...

I'm glad that you like me too. Way to take my advice ;) I can just imagine your reactions to this and it amuses me to no end. Hurray for personal growth indeed.