I'm going to review even though I have only read the first chapter and sneaked a peek to the last. Yeah, I'm a bastard. It's just that I don't like love triangles (or fourangles, whatever).. I just had to check out the people in this one. There's so few fics on the Bartimaeus Trilogy section, you see..

Ah, anyway, to the review. I think you should either write longer chapters or choose a POV or two and stick to them. It looks unprofessional to have many POV's after one other and it's harder for reader to really get into your story, when they constantly have to change the character. You have to trust that the reader will want to know more, even if the first chapter wouldn't present all the things you have planned for the story.

Well, so.. The chapter 10 is simply amazing! I mean you have really got the hang of this thing. It's good. I'm almost tempted to read the whole thing but.. Darn, maybe I will sometime. I really hope you keep writing, this story and others, where ever the inspiration leads :)

And thanks for telling there's another book coming. Why didn't I know that? Although now I'm a bit worried.. The ending of the Ptolemy's gate was just perfect. ...err. Hopefully you'll get something from the review :p

hey all ye nay sayers on this story Bartimeaus and Nat are the bomb, savvy?

This story is very funny! keep up the good work.
I starting to like this pairing!

This is so totally crazy! I ADORE it! And I love the way you write!!
Relax about the pairing.. its absolutely perfect. Wacky. Love it!

C'mon... He needs to work things out with Barty! D:

Awesome!

8/10!

Great chapter!

Great story!

Don't worry about what the pairing-critizers say. I believe that pairings are one of the things that people shouldn't criticize other people on, since even the crackiest pairing can be made to work by the right person. I understand how you feel about the pairing-criticizers since there were a lot of that type of people in one of the fandoms I'm in a few years ago. Maybe they think that they are somehow in control of the pairing because of your premise, but I know that the reviewers aren't, I assume?

Great premise, by the way, and great job with it! Most people would show pairing bias with such a premise, but you manage only to show it when necessary to the plot, which is awesome!

awesome just plain awesome

why do you ship this?

This story would be more for me if it were just Jane and Kitty and not have Bartimaeus mixed up in there.

lol, this is much better! Poor Nathaniel really seems confused now. Did I mention how much I really do like your writing style? It's very nice.

-for you.

...Lolwut? D: Is it just me or were the first few chapters eerily similar to my story? I better be getting credit for the sheer awesome that is mine, woman. -hairflip-
ANYWHO. On to the criticism.
ch. 1-5: Kitty's being a bit of a jerk, isn't she? D: Poor Barty. But things are looking up for him, it seems! (I'm rooting for Bartimaeus. Obviously.)
ch. 6-7: And Jane and Piper have snapped. Well then. I don't think it's quite possible for someone to just... explode into insanity like that. If it is, society is screwed. GO, BARTY, GO! AND SHOVE A SHARP UTENSIL UP HER NOSE WHILE YOU'RE AT IT.

Hi!
I love your story.
I just re-discovered Bartimeaus and it is real fun to read your story!
Hope to get to read more soon!
LG Luna

Great more people that I don't know. I hate to say it, but these chapters are just too short, it would be fine if they were longer, but, quite frankly, they're pretty short.

ok, sorry, no.

The new direction just doesn't work for me, i'm afraid. Farrar just doesn't get to be like that. It's just ludicrous. For me, she's gone from being a sweetly poisonous woman to a dangerously insane child in one chapter. It doesn't work. Sorry for the blunt opinion, but honesty is the best policy and all.

-for you.

Whoa I missed something here, Nathaniel sent a demon after Jane?