That was a very enjoyable story. I liked how it all took place through Edmund's POV. And I totally agree that there speech is completely weird at the end of LWW. For being your first Narnia fic, I think you got into the characters' heads very well.(And just to say it, I LOVE AsCast, too!)

Entertaining and a interesting view. A enjoyable read for me and also helped me procrastinate. I've just leveled up in the art of procrastination. I must show you my gratitude for that dear author. :)

This is instant love. I've always found it wonderful how the Pevensies could speak in a more archaic form while they were in Narnia, as it makes them sound more intelligent. And I've yet to find someone who wrote about the circumstances that you wrote about, as I guess that most people dismissed it. But now that you'd addressed the subject, I think that yes, the Four WOULD have a rather difficult time relearning how to talk like Earthlings again. I really liked the way you wrote this, and I greatly admire how you had the siblings speaking so formally most of the time (mostly because I can't speak or write archaically for long no matter how much I'd like to).

I must confess, dear author, that to me as well did the speech of the monarchs at the end sound unnatural. You have my greatest respect for being able to write this story, with their odd manner of speaking, so well. I am certain I could never manage such a thing, for even in my attempts at immitation, I fall far short. I do hope, however, that I have at least succeeded in confering my admiration for and enjoyment of this work of fiction.

Tis very strange indeed hoe they talked...

but I like how you solved the issue, they would have had to get used to manners and speech more formal than what they were used to as English children and with time and their own growth as people as well as monarchs and more dealings in the name of the country and their fellow kings and queens they would have changed...

I believe that the speech patterns in the end of LWW are there mostly to show just how long they were in Narnia, how much more Narnian they had become than what they once was... showcasing the changes they went through and how it affected them

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this story made me smile which is a hard thing to bring about, yet it also caused me to laugh which is rare to say the least. keep writing you will go far. phyonix

Love it..love it...love it! I've always wondered in the back of my mind about the Pevensies switching back to being children again.

Is it a sad thing that though I am only 16 years old, the Pevensies formal speach reminds me of my own?

'Tis true, fair lady, that contractions make for untidy speech.

I loved this. Funny and introspective at the same time- it showed how confused the four monarchs would naturally be upon returning to England. You have no need to fear... I think you got into the characters' heads rather well, and portrayed them as they should be. I honestly hope you continue writing fanfiction... especially Narnian fanfiction!

Also, congratulations on the NFFC nomination!

Oh my, I just disturbed a mass of very quiet people by laughing aloud in a library. This was FABULOUS! A similar idea was floating around in my head but now I have no need to write it out, because you've achieved such a perfect effect here. I love it! Edmund's POV was brilliant; his disgruntled frustration at the Professor's hearing was pitch-perfect (excuse the pun). The whole concept - that those exclamations at the end of LWW were of a more practical nature - is just fantastic. Attention to canon detail was wonderful. I especially loved the thoughts on Narnian schools and the Pevensies' abhorrence of the existing practice in England! Ooh, and the exchange between Lucy and Susan about faith and forgetting. Fabulous!

" 'Contractions make for very untidy speech,' Edmund frowned. 'I should be appalled to speak thus.' " -This was the line that made me laugh out loud. It's brilliant, and very, very funny.

Such a charming and delightful read! Great job!

Oh, I dearly loved this! You really captured the way they spoke, I think! At least in the book verse, anyway, and I commend you for it!

It was wonderfully written, and I look forward for more from you!

God bless you and yours,

bookwurm23

ha, i love it. you nailed the speech, and the whole thing is very funny.

This is great, Ruan! I like your explanation for why their speech changed. Thanks for the laugh! I hope to see more works from you in the near future.

Silver

Lol. Congrats on the nominations for best comedy!

VFK