| Reviews for Strange Fruit |
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Lady Cadaver 2/14/13 . chapter 6I can't wait for you to write more! I love it so far! ;D |
write more soon 2/7/13 . chapter 6 write more soon |
mikansakuraangel 1/23/13 . chapter 6Omg sexy! |
Wolvess 12/30/12 . chapter 6OMG please continue i love your story :) |
Cosmic-lover 12/11/12 . chapter 6Well this is certainly pretty interesting and kinky, not to mention it's getting kinda hott lol sooooo very wrong too buuut in a good way! Hehehe never seen it where the fox made copies of himself so very orginal with adding that into this story of yours. There's a very few Kagome/Shippo fics that I actually like and this one is going on the short list :) I can't wait to see what that devious and 'evil' Shippo has up his sleeve next for poor Kagome- update again soon so I can find out XD |
wolfYLady-MistressWolf-sama 12/3/12 . chapter 6MORE! |
booklover41 11/14/12 . chapter 6So when the next chapter? |
maggie 11/11/12 . chapter 6 i am! so far it's awesome! XD XD XD |
Guest 10/1/12 . chapter 6 This is awesome you I hope you start writing again, I hopw you never give up on this its great. |
ClawFang Venom 9/30/12 . chapter 6 I am so turned on. |
kenshingirlxoxo652 9/30/12 . chapter 6i am definitely super stoked(: |
Fear Fades Hope Lives 4Ever 9/25/12 . chapter 1The japanese don't spank their children. :x |
theheartstourniquet 9/20/12 . chapter 2Brb laughing my ass off XD |
Zandrellia 9/5/12 . chapter 6Seriously... not updated in half a year and he's not even done yet. Get on with it, girl, get on with it! Now, I should get on with my half of this bargain. The "be careful what you wish for" part... The story is rather mediocre in comparison to similar works, true. (Or, as you so eloquently put it "It's not even that good...".) There are a few errors here and there, albeit minor ones that could easily be forgiven in most cases or were just personal (read: silly) pet-peeves of mine - therefore, I will not be listing those and will just let it be. On the whole, it's rather bland in the sexual department when they are actually doing anything. Although, the earlier fantasies were rather well executed. Some parts seemed a bit rushed. On a matter of characterization: I like that you kept Kagome moderately in character. She's a brave girl, but rather innocent and inexperienced. I do think she gave in a little too fast. In regards to Shippo... hmm... how to put it... he... well it seems as if he isn't sure quite why he is doing this anymore. At first it's some sort of vengeance for her disciplinary actions against him, but then he seems to genuinely find himself attracted to her and want to dominate her. Unfortunately, not a lot of bridge is provided between the two personality types so Shippo tends to flip-flop between them going from one extreme of wanting to humiliate and dominate her to wanting to pleasure her rather quickly. He's - dare I say it - a little too nice for someone who is out for revenge. It's not even so much that he's OOC, as you claim, but more that he just comes across as completely confused which rather diminishes the point of the story. All in all, however, I don't feel like I wasted my time - so that's got to be worth something. ;) |
Zandrellia 9/5/12 . chapter 5First: I'm not a fan of rape, this is well known. However, I can appreciate that you at least didn't try to mask it as something it's not. Honestly, that is a breath of fresh air. Second: What the... "on her balloon inflated" ... seriously? T_T |