“What does your conscience suggest?”
“She hasn’t said a thing,”.

:D Love this. So much. So true, eh? I can just imagine Hawkeye feeling either way about it, depending on whether she knew how Scar had changed or not. If she didn't know, well, it's down to business, as displeasing as that business may be. If she did, she wouldn't be happy, but she'd be quietly unhappy about it.

"“She’s not my – “ Roy bit off the words. For an instant he wanted to laugh, crazily, at his constant knee jerk reaction." - T_T I know this feeling. My voice is all too familiar with the "We're not going out" line.

Ahahaha, I love that a story that's all Mustang coming to get Scar initially is turning into Royai. Good set-up, good story development :D

Ooer, Scar's being awfully familiar there. Friends, eh?

Horray, Roy liking Scar! Manga-based, right? I couldn't tell at first, but now, with all this of people liking Scar and him helping them out, I can definitely see it (and squee about it, because I know where Scar and Riza's friendship began, too, now).

Very cute :3 Looking forward to more!

"It was astonishing, he sometimes thought, how many babysitters he’d needed throughout his adult life." Excellent line! I imagine that many people of great vision need babysitting. I also liked how Roy's reflex was to deny that Hawkeye was his "lady," but he cut it off in favor of honesty.

You developed an interesting situation. It would be a very difficult for Roy to make a decision about Scar's fate. After spending his life fighting for a balanced government, he would not want to throw his weight around. However, he has clear sense of justice.

I am looking forward to your next story.

It sounded like Scar was joking in a sense even if he appeared serious. I really love it.

OMG.

*swoon* at beautiful writing.

"“She’s not my – “ Roy bit off the words. For an instant he wanted to laugh, crazily, at his constant knee jerk reaction. For just a moment, catching a flash of humour in his companion’s eyes, he wondered if Scar was making the remark deliberately just to provoke him."

Man, I LOVE the way you express your thoughts and your words.

I have no words for this piece. The number of reviews doesn't do it justice. Even though I read royai fic, this Scar/Mustang fic was just too good to give up.

And I couldn't help not saying what amazing work you've been doing. Especially the part where Riza knows what Roy's going to say before he says it.

I'm looking forward to more.

Oh, Roy, you're going against the government again? This is going to be interesting xD
I really like the little bit of Scar/Hawkeye talk you had. They really had a big moment together in the manga and it's good to see it played up.

Hi there!

Beautiful setting for the story. I love how you at first only introduce the heat, the dry grass, then that fountain, which shaped to an exaggarated size in my mind, with the school sitting on the grass in the shadow.

There's so much space and heat in that image - I felt like Roy had to walk forever to reach them. Beautifully done.

Only afterwards I visually realized that there was a lively town around that scenery. :)

“I can’t even remember if this is one of the cities that I…”
I think, not repeating this fact would create a less sallow impression. Maybe taking the note out of the introduction to the place.

It seems like the end comes to abrupt. Just one more sentences, one more thing about the way Scar looked, his expression, shortly before he comes to the important part would help the flow along. Or another sentence about Roy's own feelings.

It also feels a bit as though the talk was rather random, for it mostly circled around Roy's problem's (especially his past), even though Roy was the one to seek out Scar.

But all in all well done. I loved to read some Mangaverse after all. There's not enough of that. And your way of writing is beautiful! Keep it up! :)

Hey...hey hey, after all that nice kinda cheerful-ish at least not "I want to beat you to death" banter, I do not approve of this last line!

And then I got all freaked out--Oh no, this is all we're gonna get?! And then I saw that this isn't marked as complete, and I felt a little bit better becuase at least I didn't think you were gonna end it here and leave me hanging!

Good job.

I really liked the kind of...friendly-ish tense banter. Scar seems like ag ood guy. The more I read that he does, the more I think "Scar is not a bad guy", even though he's done bad things--I suppose the same goes for a lot of the people in FMA, a running theme, perhaps.

Anywho, great job. I'm looking forward to seeing more..

I can't see Scar smiling, either xD
I really like where this is going! Seeing a Roy and Scar fic is rare, and it's got an awesome plot.

Nicely done and I could kind of picture it.

Somehow, the idea of Scar becoming a [religious] teacher just fits. (Especially given Mei Chan.) This fic is a nice bit of warm fuzzies right up until that last line - but we can't let Roy and Scar get away that easy, can we? I'd love to see this continued.