A rather... clever (yes, let's go with clever) story you've got here. Rather... intense (yes, let's go with intense).

okay, first of all... um... like i said before, haruhi's acting weird. of course, this was so form the start, when she cried just coz kyon wasn't there, but still.

second, i kinda agree with the other reviewers. though i dont mind lemon, the plot development compared with those scenes are equal, if not less.

of course, this doesn't mean that you should lessen them to make your fic shine, it's okay. there has been a couple of fics that had equal amounts of plot and lemon, maybe even more lemon, and got some 20 reviews.

gah. whatever. one last thing before i forget. i dont think kyon would get that mad at mikuru just because she ruined the coming **.

The storyline of this has me hooked. The lemon... Well I'm not into lemon so I'll skip those parts.

Your fanfic started out quite nicely, but it is rapidly losing its appeal. Perhaps a plot advance would be preferable to hentai scenes.

i wonder why his dad never explained the green glow phenomenon to him? i mean that seems like its an important detail. i woneder where theeyll be headed off to next. in either case i hope you update soon. laterz

Oh yeah. You can just tell from the first official sentence of this chapter that this story is definitely going M-for-mature.

If you keep up the good work, your story will become the most reviewed M-rated story that is Haruhi-related. If you decide to make the conversion, there are only two old stories that you have to defeat, and if your story isn't close to the end yet, I think you'll have them beat out in no time. Of course doing this will bump off your story being visible by default, so the rate of newcomers may take a hit... man, that is a tough decision now that I think about it.

Anyways this chapter wasn't bad. Tsuruya's appearance was something I called so I expected it. It was still enjoyable nonetheless. So Red is a world where Haruhi is literally wrapped around his finger, heheh.

While it isn't my favorite angle in the world to see the teen goddess this submissive, the classic adult action was written fair enough. I'm totally not a hentai person so I'm personally hoping this story's driving force won't be sex-related. I don't think it will be -- after all, your plot has much more potential and has developed well enough.

I'm looking forward to what new plot twists this story has in store. While adult situations are welcome by many, it is the directions of the main plot that keeps me going.

I couldn't help but laugh. Some parts dragged on a bit, and some parts went by too fast. But overall, this was a great chapter.

Well, that chapter most certianly adds a new layer on things.

And great scene at the end.

Finally, an explanation for why Tsuruya has a fang. And one I've seen before, though not in a story. XD

Heheh, hadn't you best change the rating? I'm sure this has gone beyond T, now. =P

I await the next chapter... I also await Kyon hitting Koizumi too hard for some reason and doing damage disproportionate to how strong he seems...

Like breaking Koizumi's arm. In multiple places. With one punch. And lots of blood...

Ah, then there might actually be some more horror in this story! >=]

Heheh, Koizumi deserves that. Annoying smiler. XD

wow it was getting kinda hot in the end of that hallway. kyon must be hating mikuru right now. i wonder how kyon is going to keep his thirst for blood in check? i mean if its anything like a drug withdrawal, he is going to start acting very weird pretty soon. in either case i hope you update soon. laterz

The very hot beautiful enemy!

Awesome chapter, as always.

well, i don't think anybody'd mind even if this were to become m-rated. i had a feeling that this fic might have turned out that way from the start.

about his mom... seriously? i dont think i remember anything like that...

about haruhi/kyon... well, ive always loved that couple, so i'm happy you're writing moments about them... but somehow... i dunno. haruhi's too shy or something? how you portray kyon is okay, especially since you've alread admitted to changing his character a bit. but about haruhi... there's something off. i can't put my finger on it, though.

p.s. o.o does that mean i give thoughtful reviews? lol. ^^

Fascinating chapter. Quite an interesting update. I wish I could think of more to say on the matter, but I suppose that this will have to suffice.

I love the way this is written, it's perfect. Not just the chapter, but everything so far.

What's one small plot hole, compared to the excellence of the overall story?


I eagerly anticipate the next update!

Dude, don't worry. I completely forgotted about his mom. I think ALL of us forgot about her. Also, update quicker damnit!