this was absoulty brilliant!
I have never read a story like that before. If you wanted to make into a longer story I would be reading it!
Wonderful work

hey, i love this kind of stories.
i´m from germany and i don´t understand the meaning of the word "draft" in the last sentence. what does it mean in this context?
sorry for my mistakes but anyway: perfect! i am waiting for the next chapter :-)