Sad and I wish it wasn't this way. I mean their feelings for each other but this would be exactly what would happen. Sad, but I love it. Not enough good Seifer.Hayner. stories. But I DID just start liking them. Anyways, good story and I love how it's in second person. That'd be an interesting thing to experiment with. It'd probably be hard. And now I'm rambling. Sorry. I like your story very much!

Wow, second person! I love second person...Haven't met many people on FF that use it, so this was a surprise! I loved your depiction of Seifer's POV and Seifer and Hayner's less-than-perfect relationship. It's that kind of hostility at the worst moments when they're together that I really like about the couple...I love how you made everything a struggle for power; everything for Seifer and Hayner was just another fight.

I'm definitely gonna check out your other stuff...Until next time,
-LFO-

This is so depressing in a wonderful sort of way. That last sentence leaves you wanting a lot more, and I feel so bad for Seifer. It's hard to understand why I feel bad about Seifer, but not Hayner, but I do.

What amazes me most is that you managed this entire story without any dialogue, but it still flows so naturally and beautifully. Kudos for that.

- KA

This has to be the most... heart-wrenching Seifer that exists for this pairing. At least, it's the only one I've seen.

And it's brilliant. Doesn't feel like you shortcut anything, either.

Thank you for this.

- GN

This is...depressing. In a good way, somehow, because even though it ends on a bad note you've kind of left us with the impression that it'll probably turn out the way Seifer wants it to in the end. Eventually, y'know. The characterization was amazing and pretty spot-on, I thought.
I don't even mind that it's in second person, which I generally hate as a POV. You've really mastered it, though - I think it was more effective this way than it would have been any other way.
And, basically, I LOVE IT. :is in awe: WONDERFUL JOB! Keep up the amazing work! :claps:

-EtheG

These guys are too hot together! =D

Seiner? GAWD I hate that pairing. Lol, I’ll do this for my love for you. …but note you are the only one >_>! And lol, screw multiplication and leafy veggies. LE GRR!

Wow…the thought of Seifer stealing lunch money does NOT surprise me…but it gives me this ‘Kaiba’s past life’ sort of feel. Ha. PUT UP A FIGHT HAYNER…>_> there’s something about him losing to Seifer I hate…maybe it’s cuz I hate them together…sorta. Not HATE…just…you know, hate. Yeah that’s it. ;p O_O…wait now I’m curious how much MUNNY (lol) he’s taken.

Lol, get sassy? xD isn’t that like…a chick thing? HA! Much like that FAR too small belly tank excuse for a piece of cloth covering your nipples shirt…>_>

LMFAO xD HA! Ok see at FIRST, it was sort of intense; the fight between them just developing into a kiss…fight…kight? Anyway…was pretty osm. I don’t think I’ve ever read passionate/force/rivalry before and it sort of gave me a new perspective of how to write (if I ever were to do something like this but probably won’t but still its admirable) a scene like this. Still, doesn’t seem like either one of them truly understand their feelings (tho I feel like I DO and will continue to laugh at them) actually, what I am laughing at was the next paragraph where Hayner stops winning so he can just be and I QUOTE DRAGGED back to Sei’s place. HA!

O_O…*holds chest uncomfortably and sobs* so…much…rape…COLD… …feeling…so cold T_T You know what, I must give you EXTREME kudos for having written something so good…SO quickly without ANY dialogue. Now THAT’S a talent ;)! Honestly, I don’t think I’ve ever seen something written in 2nd and a half person. Lol. It’s like…it’s written sorta in Seifer’s POV but a narrator is doing it…I guess solely from his view…>_> shut up, don’t judge my inability to grammar.

Overall, that was one hell of a story. I mean…it wasn’t even a story, it was sort of like what Kingdom Hearts actually does to you; gives you a message that belongs SOMEWHERE in a timeline and it’s there for your excitement, pleasure and thirst for more. I guess the decision to quench it is yours; like if you continued this story with, lol-STORY (not that I’m being insulting! HA, last thing on my mind. I just meant dialogue and background info) there’s no doubt that I would want to read it. You seem to know the characters pretty well even tho they say nothing. So I wanna see more. OSM frikken SAUSE. HA! Used it against you!

Reading this /hurt/. I don't really have any other way to describe the sort of emotions struck-not without dissolving into a mess. I love the frank, no-frills nature; it is definitely suited toward these two. Simple, honest, /raw/... with a dash of hopelessness to finish it all off. Made my innards crawl, thankyouverymuch.

Also. Seifer/2nd-person POV FTW. Keep on rockin' X3

This was very interesting. o:
In a good way. :)

Haha, Hayner trying to dominant~
:D

wow. just...wow. very moving, I just...there are no words.