i really like your story! it's very original for the most part and i like Messiril, she's interesting. i can't wait to see how you develop her and Obi-wan's relationship, that should be interesting. anyway can't wait for the next chapter!

Love and Peace!
Lauren

Need more...

Poor, poor Siri.

I love all the twists! Can't wait to see the next twist!

Awesome, so suspenseful!

Suspense!

Dun, dun, dun...

very good, deeply suite

Great story!

tres good history bravo and deeply suite...

Wow, really interesting, can't wait to read more!

Wow. Only two chapters in and it's already gotten more interesting! The flashbacks add to the story well and create good suspense, and already I can see character development in Messiril. She is strong and interesting, and her mysteriousness is part of her intrigue. I'm still wondering how Obi's going to warm her up, and how he's going to start liking her.

Keep up the good work...

~Alicia~

Cooleo. Will this story stick with the time line or be an AU?

Per your request I have read it. And frankly, I think you're off to a good start.

Messiril is exactly how a bounty hunter is supposed to be characterized. You'll have to be careful with the tragic past, but since she's a bounty hunter, it works in her favor. Also, you've got me wanting to know more about the whole thing with Qui-Gon killing her mother. Suspense = good plot device.

All in all, you're off to a good start. I'm anxious to see how things will go with her and Obi.

~Alicia~

I do like the idea of your story, seems good so far. Please update soon =)