Wow, this was chilling. I really liked how you addressed the reader toward the end, telling him to touch the stones, to remember Charn.

I do have a question about the last line, though. Are you referring to the reader's death, or to the death of the reader's world? Or was this meant to be ambiguous?

Thanks for sharing! I hope to see more from you. :)

Very nice! Normally I find shorter stories less satisfying, but this is brilliant. The way you illustrate the absolute devastation of entropy's final victory over life and yet remind the reader that Charn COULD have been saved even after Jadis' spell if someone had intervened is very satisfying.

Oh, wow. That was simply amazing! Well-written. Keep it up! :)

oh.That was delightfully creepy. The line about how Diggory & Polly forget so easily is especially poignant I think (but then, they are young, and the young always think they are immortal...)

Darn! I had already started this review, but had forgotten that detail before clicking the button again... Nice... XD

ANYWAY, seeing as I just finished MN, this was amazing! Gosh, I loved it! The world of Charn, frankly, freaked me out/intrigued/saddened me, but your interpretation was awesome! ^U^

Gosh...that was so sad, seeing the world COMPLETELY die, as it was said to have done at MN's end! :'( SUCH a good, deseved ending, but awesome,too! ^U^

Rock on! ^U^ *U*
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Wonderful, in its own dark, slightly shiver-inducing way. There's so much beauty in the writing here, but it's dark and terrible, much like the subject matter. So very little is written about Charn but you've managed to take the little Lewis gives us and make it into this; this darkly glorious, tragic, beautiful piece. Thank you.

Very nice! I liked this very much. I could definitely feel the influence of The Time Machine here, and also perhaps a bit of Almyra's For Ever Kneel'd as well? And oddly, it also reminded me a little of Danny Boyle's Sunshine.

There is some very pretty phrasing in here. I liked "the clockwork march of sun and moon and star" and "a heap of shattered stones and broken dreams". Ooh, and the last line. Fabulous!

I'm not quite sure about the line mentioning Digory and Polly. I adore the phrase 'entropy triumphant' but I think the outside comparison draws away from the themes at hand.

Great job!