|Reviews for The land where motorrads are born|
| pf-joseph 1/13/12 . chapter 3
Hmm. The country seems unusual enough, the three-day rule, civil war and exiling of anyone exiting the country. I like how the history of the country is explained, and that the three-day rule is hopefully left for later plot development.
Kino's appearance is certainly a surprise. I'm looking forward to how he spins the tale )
There is something about the transcribing of spoken language though... the lack of punctuation is to denote the actual pace of the words coming out, and the pauses in between, but... something just doesn't feel right about it.
The story is good so far; I'm wondering how the twist is resolved, and how the woman knows Kino/Lily. Hope you'll continue it! D
| Broken Kilter Express 3/3/10 . chapter 2
Im intrigued with this and suggest that you continue working on it. I hope to see more from you soon.