Oh...my...god. BEN'S BURIED ALIVE!? NO! And...if the violence gets any worse, dude, you might wanna change the rating to T.

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Oh man was right. This could turn ugly.

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Oh boy. Nice touch with the audio player by the way. Still loving the story. Here's a suggestion: Why don't you have the Highbreed torture her instead of turning her into a DNAlien?

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Nice kidnap plan. Still love the story. I wonder what the Highbreed will do to her...

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This will most defiantly be interesting. Love the story.

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GAN GAGAN, IS EVERYONE USING MY CELLPHONE IDEA, WELL I GUESS I NEVER PATENTED THE IDEA SO IT ISN'T MINE, GREAT CHAPTER, YAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

The chapter was longer this time. Love it. Is Julie gonna get kidnapped anytime soon? The sooner the action comes, the more awesomer the story will be. Not that it's not awesome already but, you get what I mean.

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I agree with Kisdota. The summary gives off a good idea but... the first chaptr really doesn't tell us anything. This was probably about 100 words or less for the first chapter. You should at least go up to Kisdota's minumum or post a second chapter with it equaling to 1,0.

I hope that you update the second chapter soon and that it's longer. :)

~Alexa

GANTA GATA, FAR TOO SHORT, REALLY NEEDS TO BE LONGER THAN A FEW WORDS, AT LEAST A THOUSAND WORDS PER CHAPTER AT MINIMUM, MAKE IT LONGER AND I MIGHT JUST LIKE THIS, YAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA