the idea itself isn't what bothers me. The time framing and the introduction of characters is seriously lacking to me. Especially in this chapter. I'm not trying to discourage ya from writing but I implore you to reread and improve your writing techniques.

lol Miku!
Yeah, Miku should keep calling Rin and Len, Rin-Rin and Len-Len. It sounds cute!
Please update!

Oh so it wasnt neru and rin switching sides!! =0 omg len!! Screw her well!! Lol i think that rin is going to be the one who loses her innocence more than len... Len's a guy afterall.. And guys want to do that.. But then again, lens different o.o
Uhh anyway... UPDATE!

o.O
That...was a twist...lol
who knew rin wanted THAT of all things ? Cx
Well update soon~
and yea, since miku is the bubbly, girly, peppy type, she IS the kind of person (...or vocaloid)to give them nicknames :D

Yay :D

lol

i think i should stick with Len-Len and Rinny :o

KEEP GOING! :D

plz plz plz hurry and make more!! i luv this way to much and i think Rins nickname should be Rinny-rin...not that good but yea...MORE!

XDXDXDXD! Yes! keep her calling them that!

...oh, my...OMG!...w-what the--...i want the next chappie~
ur story so far so GREAT! XD sorry, i'm hyper
...btw, is the white dress Miku chose the one from Adolescence?? that dress is so pretty!

lol buter her muffin pop her cherry. anyway i like the rinny nickname it sounds cuter update soon cant wait for the next chapter.

lol Rin fell under their spell so...quickly...
OMG OMG OMG that white dress...is it the one from Adolescense? Thats the prettiest dress EVER

Can't wait to see what happens next!
Please update!

Oh my god! Hurry up and update! I cnt take it anymore I want more

noo i was so looking forward to the seductive rin part to get juicy. oh wel,update soon.

Eh?! I have a feelining that rin and neru switched places because of gumi's powers! Omg i wann know what happens! Update!

NU

MOAR! D: