Well, this is an interesting story idea.

Your writing is fine, and given that English isn't your native language it is very well done.

My biggest concern is that you are basically just rewriting the manga. Yeah, Ranma is small, but overall it doesn't appear to be making much of a difference. You need to diverge things more.

No offense, but if the story doesn't diverge people will get bored with the story. We all know how the canon went, and if the only thing that is going to change is Ranma being small then what is the point?

Make his size difference matter more to the direction of the story.

Nice chapter, can't wait to see Shampoo's apperance. ^_^

Great chapter, can't wait to see what'll happen next. ^-^

First things first, you don't have to worry about late updates since sometimes it cannot be helped.

As for your mistakes, they are relatively minor but had some trouble with these:

1.) The last thing he saw was the bright blue sphere of the sky, ere his vision faded to black - the sky is not a sphere but rather a half-sphere. The (h)ere is understandable though since everyone could make a mistake like that sometimes.

2.) The students, who watched the morning fights always from their safe classrooms, were totally dumbfounded. First, Akane's enemies fell without her touching them and now she was yelling at a little red figure that had appeared out of nowhere. -

Since the students themselves would be watching from the second or third floors (20 to 30 feet above the ground), it would be very hard to see someone or something only five inches tall standing on ground level. To them, Ranma would no bigger than a rubber eraser.

3.) From what I watched the Anime series, Kuno would not actually add his age every time he would introduce himself, that would be a bit redundant.

It would be like every time Combattler V was stated in conversation, its weight and height were also included.

Sees what he had typed above, I must be getting old to remember animes made in the seventies. (just a joke to take the sting off this commentary)

4.)Lastly, you could tell Ranma something else rather than pipsqueak. Something like shrimp, shorty, tiny, or "little" boy could have the same effect.

I know I am being a jerk in saying all of this but since I like to read your story, but I did it since I want this story to be a joy to read not to cringe.

If I had offended you in anyway, please tell how much in a PM and I will apologize immediately.

this is a very good story and i only found a few error's like words that probley didnt translate well. other then that you have a fine grasp of the english langage...its much better then Haz Von Hozel his english is really really bad.

...Y'know, here I go, thinking I've seen about every possible idea usable in Ranma fanfiction, and you spring this thing on me!

Mini-Ranma? Never seen anything like it. You get points for originality, that's for sure.

When I read the title, I figured Ranma (or maybe someone else) would be TALL. Like, three meters or something. Turned out it was the other way around. ^_^

Pretty good work, all around. Could use some polishing, but for a first story, it ain't bad at all.

Great chapter, can't wait to see those two react when they find out about the curse too. XD
plz plz update soon! ^-^

the way ranma gets treated in this story is similar to haposai because of his size maybe you can have them teem up or have a better student teacher relationship a sort of brothers in shortness

It's nice to see Yuka and Sayuri in this. Most people don't really bother with them, and if they do, it's only for a couple of lines of dialogue.

It's also nice to see Akane loosening up around Ranma. I wouldn't rush that aspect, though. You need to be really careful with it.

I can't wait to see Kuno meet Ranma next chapter. It promises to be an interesting meeting!

~Fantomo

you really need to find yourself a good beta reader...

We seem to think on a similar wavelength. What do you with a doll? Dress-up, what else. I see goth dresses in Ranma's future. :]

There are a few things that somewhat bother me about this story.

One of them is.. that Ranma is using the furo to bath...
He's what, 6 inches? He could use a rice bowl or something... probably be safer, and he could actually relax while bathing...
He could drown in the furo.

It also seems as if everybody is reacting the same as they would if he was normal sized.

It just seems as if you're not really taking too much into account of the very premise of your story.

Ranma is small... Ok, great! Why is he on a bed? He could just as easily layed on a pillow, it would be about the size of a bed for him. Or they could have converted a dresser drawer for his use. Why would he take another bath to change back into a guy... have him jump into a cup of tea or something.

Its these little nuances that can make an ok story to a very interesting one.

You have this great idea for a story, but you need to pay more attention to the details.

That's not even going into the mechanics of just how Ranma is going to fulfill his duty to produce an heir...

yeah... i'll stop there before i get to graphic regarding suggestions...

All in all, it was quite good.

Ranma/Akane fails! :P
especially when she does stuff like that to him.

Anywho, again about the ANs- the first one you didn't need the AN at all- the "While Soun told his friend's tale" summed it up well enough for fanfiction.
same with the second AN.

basically, put it at the end of the chapter or just get rid of it- it annoys many people.

Anywho, keep up the good work and update soon!

hmm. The idea is interesting, and the grammer/spelling wasn't anywhere near as bad as I expected from your AN at the beginning.

One bit of advice- don't put ANs in the middle of the story, it really negatively impacts the flow.

Now, to the next chapter :)

I like this fic, the idea of little Ranma is fun, you better have good ideas of how to handle what's comming for Ranma, a mean Ryoga, Kuno, Kodachi, Ukyo, Shampoo, etc.
The only thing i don't like is that Akane is being the same ** we all now, (and some of us dislike), so is there any chance you make this fic a non Ranma/Akane pairing? (just asking i'am going to read it anyway...)
Keep writing!