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ElvishKiwis Venerated Ancestor 6/24/11 . chapter 5I wonder if the time periods are all messed up. The man who wrote the last chapter did not seem to be in love at all... unless it was with the image of his dead wife in the mirror. And then there is the matter of Katherine (Kitty?) growing old in just one day. Although that is almost definitely the effect of the mirror. I actually don't feel that the Katherine in the story parts matches the Kitty in the letters. The former is so serious and timid, while the latter seems to be a bit of a frivolous flirt, (although quite likeable in her own way). I had to re-read the former chapters to remind myself of the story and I am very disturbed about the last one. That poor man! He is driving himself crazy with grief. |
Iliana11 6/24/11 . chapter 5Alright, Seraph, you have me intrigued. I love the story of the Snow Queen, so I'm really curious as to what you're going to do with this. I shan't speculate at the moment. Although, how old is Kitty, anyway? She almost reminds me of Kitty from Pride and Prejudice. Quite curious! |
Clar the Pirate 6/24/11 . chapter 5Kitty, Kitty you make me laugh. I think I said this last time, but now I'm writing epistolarily (totes a word) myself with letters that are far far too long so I'm appreciating it all over again - there's such a nice realism in the fact that Kitty's letters are short but they feel long to her because she's writing them. Yay! |
Clar the Pirate 1/27/11 . chapter 4Dude! You never told anyone what the prompt for this story is - or at least not publically. No wonder I'm at least a little bit less lost than all the other reviews seem to be. Ooo, good use of the word lucent. You almost had me when the falling was the house not glass but I got it by the end. I like the feeling of this one - like the actual emotion that comes out through the words. The sick lady felt a little bit like she was playing at tragedy but this man hurts. Ho, snap. Kitty you're in such the wrong direction. Dramatic tension, hurrah! |
Clar the Pirate 1/27/11 . chapter 3Sorry, sorry, sorry! To you and everyone who wanted to keep reading. I like how short these letters are - which is not to say that it would be nice if there were more length to them. But if you've ever read 'Daddy Long Legs' or 'Dear Enemy', every so often there's a bit which says 'this is a monster of a letter and I've wuite worn out my wrist writing it' or something of the sort, and my point is: writing letters by hand takes a lot of time and effort, far more than typing and it's more natural to make them short. Which is my roundabout way of trying to compliment you. I have suspicions about the sick lady but they can't be right if the mirror's not done yet, unless it's not *that* mirror. Hmmm. |
Clar the Pirate 1/27/11 . chapter 2It speaks no good of me at all that my first thought was 'hangover - suck it up, girlie'. Huh, interesting that I could tell 'I' was a girl without any markers. do you ever write guys? They're all called Katherine! A whole prison full of Katherines! I'm impressed by the wealth of adjectives this girl can think of while indisposed. Tres mysterious. |
Clar the Pirate 1/27/11 . chapter 1Then you see Christmas and New Year happened, so. Kitty's a bit of a twitterer, but with a name like Kitty how could she not be. Haha, I have a friend called Kitty so perhaps that is not an unbiased opinion. This is a silly review after all this time but I need more context before I can say anything so I'm just going to go ahead read the next chapter now. |
bellathedisenchanted 5/3/10 . chapter 2This is quite a fun read. I was pretty shocked clicking this, cause a few days ago, I'd finished a book from the library called Mira, Mirror. Its a great story, based on Snow White.) |
InChrist-Billios 10/26/09 . chapter 4Wow! I liked the insight into the man's crazed man - I think you did a good job with the loose connections, fits of lucidity, and overall confusion. And, most importantly, I got a good idea of what's going on, despite his babbling. Excellent! Nice and dramatic, too. I can't wait to see where you'll take this! Update soon! |
Pimpernel Princess 10/24/09 . chapter 4This is as confusing as story as it is well-written. You obviously have a plan in mind-I trust that everything will make sense eventually. We're only on chapter 4, but I think Kitty is adorable. Short for Katherine? I can't wait to see where you'll be taking this! May the muse be with you, PP ;) |
ElvishKiwis Venerated Ancestor 10/21/09 . chapter 4I am afraid I am still a bit confused Seraph. I can't understand the link between the two letters and the two story-type bits. *goes back and re-reads them* ...unless the girl Katherine nursing the patient is Kitty? (wonders why she doesn't introduce herself as Kitty to the sick lady then) ...the Father is obviously insane and I guess the woman patient is too...maybe the woman is not a woman at all but Kitty's father... but then why would she treat him like a stranger, and let him wear dresses? And why would she suspect that he is in love with someone and imply that that is a good thing? I am very sorry for being so dense. I am sure you were trying to be very profound and subtle, but I didn't get it I'm sorry. On a more positive note however this last chapter was very cleverly written. It is very hard to portray a madman and the repetition and memory fragments clearly provide the cause of such insanity, and, I guess, the absence of Kitty's mother. It is how the mind works when it has never recovered from a serious shock like witnessing the violent death of a loved one. I like the phoenix analogy, very fitting. The whole Snow Queen stuff and strange snow and ice was really good too. It makes sense that the Snow Queen might want to capture more people than just little Kay, ...or is Kitty's Dad actually Kay grown up? *thinks Kay married a 'Gretal' not a 'Celia'* *thinks some more* Oh, the swollen eye might be because he/she had a fragment of mirror in the eye and that is why he/she suspected Katharine's intention was to kill him/her. Anyway, Perhaps you could insert an author note for some of us poor confused readers (assuming that I might not be the only one), explaining how it all fits... actually don't do that, I have a better idea. Call the whole piece a riddle and give us the challenge to guess what it is all about. I have actually quite enjoyed the process of weighing up the various senarios, and I am sure others would too as long as they were warned that that was what was expected from them. They would also be encouraged to write reviews about their speculations, and you could promise to PM them the answer and post the 'winners' -ie those who guessed correctly- on the next chapter intro. If you were Billi you would also offer virtual goodies as prizes! *winks* |
Backroads 10/20/09 . chapter 4That was intense. And it gave a little clarification on character. Beautifully written and intriguing. |
Backroads 10/20/09 . chapter 3Yup, I'm back! I find this fascinating. The letters are interesting, but I think I prefer the traditional novel style. Then again, the letters add so much. Keep it up! Fascinating perspective. |
Raenad 10/18/09 . chapter 3I love it! Elsie seems very bubbly, innocent and sweet. I like her! I'm very very worried after reading your reply. Oh dear. I'm going to keep reading, though, because I love your characters. |
alreese99 10/13/09 . chapter 1 Nice first chap. I like the way you open it, thought its not usually my style. Btw, you do know there is a book, based on Snow WHite called Mira, Mirror, check it out, its wonderful, touching. |