Sorry i can't review sooner. Exam is up, so you see. This one is not as funny as before, but have more trouble than before, so i will say this is better. Yes i can imagine Shirley can do something like that every now and then, especially with Norma at her side:D
But i think she will try to apologize soon after, haha. Moses do his part well too. Congrats,keep writing.

This story starts out pretty interesting. I can actually imagine Senel and Chloe's relationship starting like that and it just makes me laugh hard.

The part where Chloe almost drowned because of Shirley and Norma is also something I could imagine. Shirley can be pretty evil inside, can't she? So I am guessing this means that it is clear that Shirley is over Senel, huh?

Your writing is good. First person perspective is harder than people think, but I believe you're doing it pretty well. Chloe would do and think most of these things, so you got her in character, until insanity strikes.

Only problem: Are there other pairings, or is it just Senel/Chloe?

Anyway- I hope you update soon :D

~Rave

i cant help but feel this was apretty good chapter cute if any thing, her confessions make half the story xD, oh alas our good knight falls into suacy situation only to come up dry(pun intended x3)hopefully things will get better the next time haha...shirly and norma=<3

hmm~ honestly im surprised and glad you updated, please keep up the good work, ill be looking forward to future chaps. please take care in the mean time :p

Interesting. Most of the time, when you see a fanfic involving two characters who begin a relationship, the confession scene (you know, the whole I-like-you/I-like-you-too part) is the climax, and the story ends pretty soon after that. So I think what I like best about this story so far is that you started with the confession, and now we get to see where it leads. It's something that's not done nearly as often, and it definitely helps to set your fic apart from the rest.

I also liked your take on the confession itself... them getting frustrated and maybe even angry with each other is a pretty unique way to go about it, and it makes sense enough given the characters we have here and their situation (how could you not get annoyed with someone who liked you back all that time but somehow failed to notice your feelings even though they were that obvious?). And the way they established themselves as a couple ("Are we a couple?!" "Yes, we are!") was hilarious.

I'm looking forward to seeing how Chloe goes insane, of course. :) I think that's what pulled me into the story in the first place, and it's also quite unique... rather than the typical approach of making the readers wonder what will happen in the end, you tell them what happens in the end (Chloe goes insane) and they read to find out how things could possibly get to that point. Overall, very creative, interesting way to start off a story!

Yeah, Chloe! Punch him! Punch him! -chants- That was amusing. And I agree, Chloe totally rules.

And yes, Chloe shall most certainly go insane...^_^

LOL. You made my day!
i was back from school, totally tired and angry(i had a bad day) and when i clicked ffnet, i wasn't expect something refreshing story like this will show UP.
IT IS JUST GREAT!
So funny! how they make up, and how they declared to be a couple.
i'll look forward for your next

greatest hook-up EVER. lawl! xD seriously though im liking this story. was dragged here by the title(how can you pass up a title like that?) looking forward to good stuff :P interesting start.

please take care in the mean time

Hahahaha! This is a great story!! Please keep it up!

BTW, love the confession scene! It cracked me a lot!

I'm hoping to see more!