So far this is great. Please add more.

Funny... Add a it more esbian action to the mix and you got yourself a true story.

Tsk tsk...what language!

Incredible. As a complete contrast to your previous FE fanfiction, this one is hysterically amusing. The mechanical horse plot device was magnificently creative (you seem to be one of the few others that I've met that have ever read, 'Scud: The Disposable Assassin'), and I love the manner in which you describe the characters (along with how they seem to be utter contrasts to how they appear in the games... Rain is seemingly a dolt, and Hana is quite a bit more serious) and their behavior. Also, the dialogue is top-notch, with very believable interplay between the characters. The developing relationship between Hana and Rain is definitely something that I'm enjoying (where are you, and why aren't you writing additional chapters?), and the concept of that insane world appeals to my demeted perception of humor. Giant pink robotic teddy bears with machine cannons and RPG launchers? Incredible! Also, the names of the 'Paragnomes' were creatively stolen from various other characters (Maude Flanders... She's been resurrected as a gnome! Wow, will there be any characters adding 'diddly', or 'dokly' to a sentence? Please, please, please, ensure that, if you do, this character dies a terrible and humorous death at the hands of a beer-swilling, obese, bald, yellow teddy bear...).

In essence, this is one of the most amusing pieces of parody\AU\humor fiction that I've ever read, and I'm anxiously awaiting further installments. If you don't continue this, I'll be dispatching a special, MONSTROUSLY HUGE Teddy Bear with Rain's patented Hypervelocity (I still prefer the term, 'Lorenz Force Field-Based Slug Cannon, or just the old-fashioned 'Rail Gun') cannons mounted on every available square cm of its body as an incentive...

Def. gonna be looking forward to finding out what else you have in store for the girls.. )

lmao!

Oh, gosh, that was the funniest thing I have read in a looooong time! Keep writing this!

Noooo! The Gears have stopped turning! We're all going to DIIIIIEEEEEEE!

Tereena- I...think he ate one to many a rotten Flan...come on Bahamut.. let's get you a Bomb to chew on or something...

I love the relationship you are building between Hana and Rain. Keep it up!

PS:- Holli: any chance of you e-mailing me a link to the other FE fics you mentioned? They sound like the kind of fics I was hoping to find here *he he*

Heehee this fic is great! - I can't wait to see what happens next! Keep up the good work!-

Hehehe... I hope you write more of this!

...Interesting

PLEASE! DO MORE!

I don't know where you get the idea that Rain is such an air head but I like it. It's very funny!

Hurray for LONG epics!

Keep it coming Deek ;0)

Good stuff! Keep going, keep going!