Love it! This is one of the stories I look forward to the most. It's just a great story! Keaira has the perfect balance of being tough, feminine, mysterious, etc. Lovely! :)

HAPPY NEW YEAR! love your story well thats all for now. :) until next time.

I can't imagine writing a paragraph in Ardeth's POV let alone whole chapters...your story is very interesting so far.

This is one of the stories I look forward to the most. :) Ya gotta love Ardeth...and you know, every single time now that I think of that character, I think "our death"...thanks a lot. lol ;)
Anyway, fabulous work! I'm really enjoying the secrecy you bring into the characters.

I like it! Please update soon. :-)

Wow. I love Jonathan and the fact that he had the ankh to open the door was just perfect! Maybe since Jon had the ankh (key) then he might be targeted by the bad guys and get hurt? I love when Jon gets hurt. Never happens enough in Mummy stories.

Great chapter and I'm looking forward to more.

awesome the o'connells are alawys getting in trouble :p update again soon!

Ah, the darn cliffhangers! lol Wait, why am I complaining? I just did one myself in my own story. :) hehe *sigh* I love this story. You're doing wonderfully! You should have seen the grin on my face when I saw that you had updated. Anyway, lovely as always!

I have reviewed and I am not satisfied.

Why are the chapter's so short? And why have you not updated? Why am I asking these questions when I could pester you to update in school? Why do I like this story so much? Why am I still asking questions?

Anyways, I'll see you in school ^-^

Hmm. I think you need to sort out your tenses in your narrative. One moment you're in past tense ('I laughed') then you're in present tense ('I have joined my friends the O'Connells') then past again ('as they explored') and then past perfect ('It had been two years since...)

You need to work out what you're going to use and then keep it consistent throughout. I don't mind which you go for, but I can't read something that dots about like this. It's not only confusing to read, it's annoying.

oh i love this story update soon i cant wait to see what happens next.

Wonderfully done! Bravo! :)

**slowly dies** why so short? this is great!

ooh love the story im hooked update again soon.

I have a feeling that this story is going to be AMAZING! Keep it decent and keep going like this...wow, this is gonna be cool! :) Great work and update soon.
Oh, yes, and I hope you get more reviewers...this deserves it.