very good work

Nice story. You need to finish it, please!

An interesting start. I don't see the Patil twins focused on very often, and your Gringotts idea is yet another example of wizards lacking common sense. I hope you continue this story at some point; I would like to see how things pan out now that Harry knows of the Horcrux.

please continue

Interesting story.

I like how such a simple thing as Harry getting a clue at a specific moment can have such an effect.

I liked the dance with the twins on the last song. I bet that caused some gossip, wonder what Skeeter wrote about it.

Good work showing the fight between Harry and Ron, and I liked how Parvati seems to be squeezing Ron's spot out of the picture.

Nice work with the trip to Diagon, that was so Dumbledore to say no and suggest how to get around the rules.

Nice idea with the second hand books, and I like that while interesting they aren't basically guides to being super-Harry like in some stories.

Great work with picking up Winky and the barter system of payment.

More soon please. Though I checked the publishing date and it looks like this story is dead.

this is a great story please update this its great

Brilliant beginning, can't wait to see what's next!

'Twill be interesting to see where you take this. It most certainly does have the potential for going Harry/Multi, likely with Hermione as Senior wife and then possibly Parvati and Padma just under her. I most certainly think that Ron's now managed to thoroughly burn his bridges with Harry and, with both of her roommates putting Ron on their "fecal roster", I would find it difficult to beleive that Lavendar would have much, if any, interest in him later.

Outstanding! New slant on the Yule Ball, with some twists I hadn't expected but truly enjoyed. The Patil Twins and Hermione being at Harry's side, Ron getting sent to the showers - please, let it be for good! - and the Gringotts episode...truly Brilliant!

I hope you continue this, and get poor Luna in; she needs and desrves the aid and comfort the new power group could give her, and she would add a unique twist of her own to the blend. Padma, being in her House, could provide the introduction by merely standing up for her during the bullying going on, which would serve as Luna's intro into the group...

So, what do you think, o Learned Writer of Greatness?

Yet another excellent story from you. I always thought that Harry never felt near guilty enough for his behavior at the ball. I mean he was just plain rude to a girl that did him a favor. Actually she did him a number of favors. She agreed to go to the ball with him at the last minute (with very little time to get everything she needed) and also managed to get her sister to go along with his friend (who I imagine has a bit of a reputation for how he acts, I am sure Parvati would let Padma know how Ron could be at times). Even if Parvati is portrayed as a bit flighty in the books it is still not a good reason to be a prick to her at the dance that you asked her to. the way your characters interact flow very well and I think stay true to how they are. None of them acted in a way that I could see would be unbelievable for them to act. I am enjoying your portrayal of the Patil twins and the way they seem to play off of each other. It has led to some amusing reactions from Harry that get a laugh out of me at times. If you are looking for any input relationship-wise I would like to suggest either at least one Patil included in the relationship. It would just help keep the thing fresh since you could make the Patil behave how you want them to direct the group's behavior as a whole. What I mean is that since the Patils' character is mostly left unknown in canon that you can make changes (that could be a result of being around Harry and Hermione) and that behavior influences a change in Harry or Hermione as a result. Anyway you have a great start here and I am eager to see what develops from this point onward.

Please do a foursome! Think of the Twins! Twins!

I love this story, it is so good. I wholeheartedly support a H/Hr/Patils ship, it would be awesome.

Good luck with the writing

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Enjoyed it, only place that made me cringe was when Harry parted ways with Sharg with the goblin speak, it was really cliche for me.

I am really interested in what happens next, although I'm not too crazy about the polygamus ships.

Love the story. I completely agree with you on the pairings. I love Harry/Hermione so i was thinking that if you do decide to put them together (gosh, I hope you do, :D) then may the Patil twins vould be paired with the Weasley twins. Personally I love the Weasley twins, and I think that they would be a good addition to your story. Anyways, can't wait for more!

Love,

Loren :)

P.S. I love Cedric Diggory (hint, hint) :D